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Cradle Creek
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Cradle Creek |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Cradle Creek Purple shadow fingers gave pause, then his hand warmed against muscles that hadn't felt warm since the river last crested and his print seemed to promise a beating of heart echoing soundless strains of "I'll stay" and this time, somehow, I knew it was safe to breathe again. ~*~ And like the river before the rains all was quiet tender pull slow moving, languid, no wake until the first drops pooled ripples and he looked upriver into green and cloudy skies marking time marking Twain telling time with his hands hold off go back making discoveries of the known, but new as earth moans traveled winds and the rushing water was still upstream ~*~ "Do you know August?" the question was asked later in quiet shade and I wondered for a moment a bare moment nude of veils and inhibitions, thinking that I thought I did, once, when it was too hot to move, too torrid to tempt thirst but this August, this August, cool to the touch and warm to the belly, was different just as he would be, and I would be, from this, our instant, forward "Yes," I said, "but I've never known one just like this." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I've never known one just like that either. I wish I had. Lovely  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, I would like to visit Cradle Creek, after reading this wonderful, romantic piece...but I think I'm too old now....this was very lovely.  ....jo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this I like, although August heat has returned  M |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
absolutely beautiful |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done ma'am... very nicely done |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Now that is one heckuva statement...enjoyed the write Soleil. Nice images. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is a great read for a chilly August. It is great to see your thoughts again. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful wonderful read this morning Soleil. Gave me a touch of melancholy... or wanderlust perhaps? Hugs sweet lady~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautifully melancholic yes |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Nicely crafted. Enjoyed the imagery. CG |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
I have missed the beauty of a fading summer's dream. Forgive me, August. If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
A vision brought to life by your words...Beautiful.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Excellent !!! |
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zippi Member
since 2004-03-31
Posts 56California |
This is exactly beautiful Rene` |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOW.. I love this, a lot. I know that's not saying much on my part, but geez. I'm keeping this one saved. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Truly a masterpiece. I enjoyed reading into it on a couple of different levels. A very passionate write that left me thinking about how much talent there really is in these little blue pages. This one's a keeper. Warm regards, Kevin |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
they say heaven was created in august sometime in the afternoon when the sun was low in the sky and the windows were open can see that here |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
Terrific presentation, conversation cascading over river rock and log... Enjoyed the read. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
"Yes," I said, "but I've never known one just like this." Yes, I say too....never known, and never forgotten. This poem is one I will keep for a long time. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The title drew me in... and how glad I am it did! *S* This is beautiful... and the ending... one for the memory books. *S* |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Suthern, we've always felt akin to titles...it has to pull us in. Thank you for reading... James, as ever the gentle poet. Thank you. Pell, I am delighted you enjoyed the view. DS, you see that, and more. Thank you for YOUR eyes. Kevo, different levels were hoped for. That you saw more than one tells me I may have succeeded. Thank you. Meghan...your little SAYS a lot!  Zippi, Nightshade, Startime, thank you very much, ladies. IndigoEve...it is not too late. Plenty of August left... CastleGuard, passing shadows, it pleases me to see you here. Thank you. Enchantress, a stew of two, yes. kayjay, Magnus, JamesM...gentlemen, thank you very much. Cpat, that you know, you know, thank you. Ruth, Maureen, thank you, ladies. Iliana, never be THAT old.... Maree...perhaps you will? Who is to say otherwise? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Such a graceful way to say it....love, that is. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Soleil "from this, our instant, forward" And that is all there is really, that and memory. Loved this! |
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