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A Winters Visit
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A Winters Visit |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{Recollections of a winter’s journal} ~~**~~ Reflections and then night better still grains of sand on an empty shorelines yet somehow we are the same delicate and soft searching for beauty in swirling patterns There’s a broken dream upon the sea if you listen with your soul you can hear her flight amidst the clouds petals were falling I bent down to touch silk meaning, while blue veils went unrecognized -- wishing for you to- - sing to me of the moon and sky tell of this journey over and over again for hours I stood listening I’m alone in this infinite charm in the wake of dust we’ll dance tonight holding stars - - gathering memories of heart your beauty, stirred wind haunting my eyes Your whisper, I bury in my soul tucked against pressed palms and gentle fingers Leave the roses in their box let rain scatter their ashes in rhythms of wind and water they will eventually make way back to sea here,- - now, we are branches swaying side by side in darkness waiting for a winter’s visit I embrace this feeling and miss your mere silhouette moments such as these leave me --lonely and searching for your hands I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
as usual.. you leave me in awe... wonderful write my friend..and with your usual style.. something to be read and pondered.. savored.. and then reread.. to do it again |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Reflections and then night better still grains of sand on an empty shorelines yet somehow we are the same delicate and soft searching for beauty in swirling patterns my  sister...oh my my my.... you tug...so lightly...  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This piece is simply stunning.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"in the wake of dust we’ll dance tonight holding stars - - gathering memories of heart" and what a gorgeous dirvish dancer you'd make too! this is beauty, sweet Lauren. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
~ "There’s a broken dream upon the sea if you listen with your soul you can hear her flight" ~ "Leave the roses in their box let rain scatter their ashes in rhythms of wind and water they will eventually make way back to sea" Be there no doubt, you are a poetess of the highest order!  EA |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautiful is all I can think of. :-) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I bent down to touch silk meaning, while blue veils went unrecognized -- ~~~~~~~~~ in the wake of dust we’ll dance tonight holding stars - - gathering memories of heart your beauty, stirred wind haunting my eyes Your whisper, I bury in my soul tucked against pressed palms and gentle fingers Leave the roses in their box let rain scatter their ashes in rhythms of wind and water they will eventually make way back to sea here,- - now, we are branches swaying side by side in darkness waiting for a winter’s visit I embrace this feeling and miss your mere silhouette moments such as these leave me --lonely and searching for your hands =========================== *sigh* how can i pick fav verses when i feel every word....time and time again you haunt me lovely....your muse is enchanting and lovely poetess L.  |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
I’m alone in this infinite charm broken down to a phrase, this is perfect! Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"for hours I stood listening" or longer perhaps . . . I may have to borrow that line, if I can find a way through it |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"There’s a broken dream upon the sea if you listen with your soul you can hear her flight" Lauren, this was beautifully haunting. You have a gift at doing that!  ....jo |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
hotty poem , this would keep anyone warm in the winter lol ...your words kindle a warm fire wolfy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible! |
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