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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I’ll quote it wrong Mix the syllables into a cadence incomplete Until in the end it sounds as if Rain hit hot tin And all the hiss is syncopated madness Chaos of delivery it seems “Pictures at 10” once again someone tries to capture the soul without the words to explain the depths behind eyes of brown or blue or green Dictionaries lie you know One word to you in meaning belies the way Others hear it spoken or what it means But pictures you say Capture all It a lie Too many times told in 20 second bytes And I can only shake my head Grin if in me there is a muster And nod Always nod As if you know you were understood Read this to me And find the right rhythms to say it That I so absently discarded along the way In my search for the spaces between words The look of unheard Tell me Why I stutter in endless parody of love And how the rain in August can remind me That your fingers against my lips Hushed then the roar Of storms |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You do have a way of transforming common... to rare. |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
alright, im wowed by this poem, already at a loss for words..then Sunshine goes and says something awesome and i get dumbfounded and awestruck all over again. so yeah, what SHE said LOL  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Um, sorry...i wrote that message above, but forgot to change the username from my housemate's! sorry about that!!!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’ll quote it wrong Mix the syllables into a cadence incomplete Until in the end it sounds as if Rain hit hot tin And all the hiss is syncopated madness Chaos of delivery it seems “Pictures at 10” once again someone tries to capture the soul without the words to explain the depths behind eyes of brown or blue or green Dictionaries lie you know One word to you in meaning belies the way Others hear it spoken or what it means But pictures you say Capture all ======================================== Always nod As if you know you were understood Read this to me And find the right rhythms to say it That I so absently discarded along the way In my search for the spaces between words The look of unheard ===================================== OH YOU ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you have just written what muse and I struggle with all the time.... ah yesssss..."if words but could they would" and mine cant...yayaya  this is the coolest poem..... yet another for my Capt. collection oh....and to answer this question... Tell me Why I stutter in endless parody of love cuz if ya didnt? we'd come looking for ya. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the rain in August can do a lot of things |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
wow...I wish I could write like that awesome |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Read this to me And find the right rhythms to say it That I so absently discarded along the way In my search for the spaces between words The look of unheard Tell me Why I stutter in endless parody of love And how the rain in August can remind me That your fingers against my lips Hushed then the roar Of storms"" Ron, you have out spoken yourself here...such an amazing stanza and feeling ~*~ I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I am left breathless -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I knew from the title I would love this, no one could write broken english like you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Read this to me And find the right rhythms to say it That I so absently discarded along the way In my search for the spaces between words The look of unheard" ~ My English should be so broken!!! A brilliant write!  EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And how the rain in August can remind me That your fingers against my lips Hushed then the roar Of storms Stutter for me anytime. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
this is wonderful... a true poet... Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Because they did....and that's really all a man needs to know. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ah, to "hush the roar of storms" now THAT's a moment I'd remember forever |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"And how the rain in August can remind me That your fingers against my lips Hushed then the roar Of storms" - - - - - - - - Your poetry is impressive, Sir. Thanks for this. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Tell me Why I stutter in endless parody of love And how the rain in August can remind me That your fingers against my lips Hushed then the roar Of storms" Loved these lines and understand them well; loved the entire poem and so admire your style of writing.  ....jo |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
damn you can even stutter eloquently...lol love this, feel every breath... P E A C E and O N E **babyblue** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
again, such beauty . . I noticed your preoccupation with eyes . . . the mirror to the soul. Dictionaries lie you know One word to you in meaning belies the way Others hear it spoken or what it means But pictures you say Capture all It's a lie Too many times told in 20 second bytes And I can only shake my head so very true . . . |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow... um, yeah... wow. No other words... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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