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Unopened (Part 2)
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Unopened (Part 2) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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He stood solemn as a tombstone on a mist covered morn. Reflecting of past years they had shared. The letter, lying silent, serene upon the hearth, he avoided the sight of it. Hoping it might just be part of a dream. The flicker of a night’s fire glowing on mahogany walls, dancing peacefully, bringing music to his ears as her hair brushed a cheek...back then, before the click of a door, one placed square in the center of his heart. The softness of a rug, once having drawn them to it’s folds, bringing an endless kiss to inhale their passions. So soft, this place where they once lay, now...so chilling, no longer warm. He touched the letter, feeling the lifeless texture of it, trying to count the pages within, smelling the exterior, aching to find a trace of her upon it, wondering if she had used her tongue to seal the flap. Perhaps, perhaps not. Gently, ever gently...he kissed the seal, shuddering briefly...knowing the time was near...but not this time...for the sound of the click still hurt...and he must heal before her words could be read. Soon my love, soon the courage shall mount within the veins of man. And when it does, a river shall run before it....as I weep of thee, once more. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Bravo sir , fine pen work ...very fine, it echos deep within the walls of the heart and soul ... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I am running out of tissue, BJ...I think I'll have to get another box for I sense the opening of the letter coming soon. Such a heartfelt work this is, so tenderly penned.  ...jo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Aujussy...thanx for you comments, we try to please. Iliana...Jo, I am sorry I forgot to FEDEX some tissues to your doorstep....Texas is a big state and I didn't know the city... Soon..yes, I would think soon. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
 tears of pity spring from my heart for love lost and left. Your work is moving, dear sir.Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thank you Susan...it is easy to write of things that have been experienced in one's lifetime to one degree or another....but I would never blame the other person...for most all relationships are built or destroyed by the twain... working on part 3....perhaps the final part. AARRRRRGH? That would be a good name, huh? For the pirate movie....you made me laugh! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Soon my love, soon the courage shall mount within the veins of man. And when it does, a river shall run before it....as I weep of thee, once more. sigh...what a lovely ending/beginning hope, faith and love terrific write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I cannot find the words to express my complete awe and admiration for your writing talent ~ and your poetic heart!  Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Excellent writing my friend. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ahhh part 2 did not give the answers the reader seeks... Very well done!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh....you tease.... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fantastic...reminding me of an email of apology I recently received from an old acquaintance...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*click* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling man, I didn’t know you’d done a series, this is exquisite. I swear I can feel the suppressed longing within. I love it utterly of course, for you are an artist at this type of thing The poem is truly wonderful as are you, exceptional writing from one of PiP’s most talented writers. Off to read the rest xxx as always Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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