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Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2004-08-07 09:31 PM

It's all here somewhere,
buried beneath the slag heap
of corroded memories -
The dreams, the desires,
everything I ever wanted,
the plan for my life -
all buried deep.
I knew it all once
when I was young ,
when the world was before me,
when hi, was more than a greeting
it was a way of life -
At first the rush was wonderful
euphoric and overwhelming;
my mind expanded
and I encompassed the universe -
soared with the angels
but quickly forgotten
too quickly sometimes
until the rush no longer held sway .
I lost dreams then -
I'm still trying to find some of them,
they hid beneath the rubble
of merely surviving -
of getting through the next day -
and the next.
They're still there somewhere,
I believe this,
if I can just find them
if I ...perhaps tomorrow I'll find them,
if I dream long enough -
if I fossick hard enough –
if I live…

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2004-08-07 09:52 PM

Wow Keth, this poem says so much. I believe
we all have that heap where they lie buried.

I also believe we will find the answers.

I believe you will... I believe I used
the word believe enough....do you believe
this too?

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-08-07 09:53 PM

Excellent. Yes, the loss of the optimism and invincibility of youth, well put here. Would that we could find those dreams once again, yes? And believe in their fulfillment.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

3 posted 2004-08-08 12:53 PM

Excellent work, perhaps all that work makes those little treasures so precious when we find them! Take care!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-08-08 01:02 AM

Good write, Lynn. Confessions here that we all have in one way or another...whether an addiction to a job or to something else, sometimes life and dreams just get buried...the good news being, they're only buried, not lost.

....jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-08-08 03:50 AM

awesome!

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

6 posted 2004-08-10 11:07 AM

Keth beloved one, Oh dear Lord, how exquisite is this, I wish so much I had even half your ability darling one, but its no use I never will. You know I’m going to say this is utterly perfect don’t you? Well, of course I am because it is. The structure, the flow, that ending all combine to reveal the genius that is you, your writing is truly outstandingly good, and that you can write so that I believe in the person is a prime example of that.

Truly exquisite beloved one, I love this, I love it utterly

Love you always
And forever more
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2004-08-10 11:23 AM

Yes, our dreams and aspirations can get buried under the fall-out debris from experiencing life's day-to-day battles. But all is not lost to you! I am sending you a shovel to dig up those buried treasures! Dream on, Dear Kethry! Tomorrow is another day ~ and as Orphan Annie sang out, "The Sun will come out tomorrow!"

A very well-written and moving write which will be greatly understood by many of your readers!

May you uncover your dreams and manifest them into reality!

EA

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2004-08-10 11:36 AM

You know Lynn, we are on the same wave length today...I was just sitting here wondering what my purpose in life is...

hugs
M

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2004-08-12 12:13 PM

Nice writing...start digging...reminding me of Kill Bill 2 when she dug her way out of a casket...her secret...she was a very determined woman...James

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2004-08-13 03:39 PM

Some of my dreams are better left buried... some of them will be buried with me. *S*

This is wonderful, my friend... the ending is as powerful as it is poignant!!! Absolutely excellent!

And if you need some help digging... let me know. *S*

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

11 posted 2004-08-13 05:38 PM

Keth....haven't talked to ya in awhile..just sitting here, reading your wonderful poetry, putting Vegemite on my lips and thinking of you.....

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

12 posted 2004-08-15 05:54 AM

this is a beautiful write from a beautiful woman!

Paper Tiger
Member

since 2003-09-28

Posts 77

13 posted 2004-08-15 06:31 AM

This is an excellent piece here. Great job!

In my eyes, I'm not lazy. In your eyes, I'm not worth it.

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