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Terrina Kethryveris
Member

since 1999-12-06

Posts 53
USA

0 posted 1999-12-08 05:26 PM

I dream this dream most every night
Mine eyes behold a most wondrous sight

Always the same never changing
No matter how far my eyes maybe ranging

I stand there upon the snow covered ground
This sea of brilliant white all around

A snow covered plain
With one small red stain

Upon the only hill
A River of red does spill

The River no longer flows
For completely solid it is froze

A River of blood
Once flowed like a flood

At the top of the hill its source
A heart that once beat with such force

'Twas broken by your hand
Resides now in this land

Frozen and unfeeling, this heart that once beat strong
Placed here upon this hill by all that you've done wrong

No hope of being free
There is no prince for me

No man dares traverse this land
And take thine frozen heart in hand

And so it's left as it is seen
A picture on a movie screen

Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 1999-12-08 05:38 PM

Firstly welcome to the Dark Forums.!

This poem is magical, great imagery, feelings, it's almost like a song. It's beautiful my friend

The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

2 posted 1999-12-08 06:31 PM

Yes, the imagery is awesome...I always adore reading your work

Jenny

Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

3 posted 1999-12-08 07:43 PM

Yes, wow! What imagery. I could see the darkness, with the white snow and bit of red rose..Let's just say everything!
Enjoyed.

JOY

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

4 posted 1999-12-09 10:26 AM

Brilliant poem

Didn't much care for the Font

keep it up

Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 1999-12-09 12:30 PM

Beautifully painted my friend. . .

Welcome. . .

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

summer
Member

since 1999-11-23

Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa

6 posted 1999-12-09 02:11 PM

i agree, as i read this poem i could see it so vivid like it was a dream i had, or a movie i have seen before..i love this one...keep up the good work...

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 1999-12-09 03:27 PM

Beautiful poem, Terrina. I hope we will see much more from you here.

Michael

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

8 posted 1999-12-12 09:38 AM

Wonderful imagery. Nicely done.

-RS

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

9 posted 1999-12-12 01:18 PM

I easily get vivid images in my of things said and that river and the heart frozen and broken are in my mind never to leave.
BTW welcome dear to this place of weavers and smith's, and keep the posting up I wish to see more.

If all who are born are ment to die, I should not have been born, for I will never die.

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