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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Soul-Sick Tangerine Stained exhaustively popped like a licked lolly Manipulated playground wills a pulverable fruit Rhetorical promises made in my mind provoke buried memories safely kept ------------------------------------------ (this was revised...i left the original here to so everyone could see where the tone went. I embellished on what i really wanted the reader to get from this. It wasn't very clear.) Soul-Sick Tangerine (old one) I want to turn you inside out ...lick you like a lolly pop Play on you like a playground, and bury you when you become a memory. [This message has been edited by armanca (edited 12-08-1999).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Now this one is superb!!  ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Thank you Isis. If you can believe it. This is about a victim...living on a false sense of strength. I appreciate your comment. Carman |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I love this!!! Jenny Lee ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Thanks for the explanation ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Thank you Jenny Lee...that means a lot. Carman |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Brought this back to the top because i revised it.  |
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