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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland 
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Stop it do you hear? Just give it a rest, On and on you complain to me, But in doing so my dear, It's now I who is in fear. I fear I shall never please you, I'm meant to suffer in your eyes, I don't deserve the good things in life, All you do is critise. Do you even begin to understand, What it's like to do nothing different day after day, I like to leave the house once in a while, So I too can have fun and play. I do all I can to fill my days, But I just need to get out, To say nothing of our son, No wonder he screams and pouts. There's got to be another way, I way for me to live, Cos it seems to me right now, I'm the only one who gives. I'm just left here all alone, I could die and you wouldn't even know, I can't take to my bed even, For no one else would show. We are a family, We need to do things together, Even if it's raining outside, Whatever is the weather. I can't live a stagnant life, I need to open the door, Or one day it really might happen, I'll be lying dead on the floor. ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) [This message has been edited by Isis (edited 11-21-1999).] |
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Thaddeus Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 78MA |
The picture of stagnancy you paint is effective, what catches me most is the line "I'm meant to suffer in your eyes" like the speaker is trapped inside, not just a home, but in the eye of the oppressive spouse - more than walls and words are closing in on the speaker. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
 Well seen Thaddeus and thankyou  ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
I feel sad to see someone that gets "trapped" as I was in something that is meant to be beautiful and loving... hopefully things will turn in a good favor. Very Beautifully done though. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- [This message has been edited by Deverone (edited 11-22-1999).] |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Isis, you have such a way of exploring every nook and cranny of what you feel and then express it to us with great and vivid emotional rawness. Is it wrong to enjoy this work? I don't know, but I do. It's like being in the room, so cutting is the sensation of reading. DB ------------------ Motel, money, murder, madness. Let's change the mood from glad to sadness... ===MOJO=== |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
DB, what a magical thing to say!! Thanks so much!! ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem, Isis. By all means, open the door...don't let the stagnancy get the best of you. michael |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Michael, this warrior princess will always battle on ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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