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mojar
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa

0 posted 1999-11-17 05:31 PM

outside a storm rages on,
dark clouds fill the sky.
it is in the trust,
wherein the protection lies.

what is to fear,
things we cannot see.
or just the shadows,
that forever be.

looking out,
searching for the end.
of the thunder and lightning,
only to begin again.

inside a storm rages on,
dark clouds fill my heart.
an emptiness dwells within me,
tearing me apart.

forever i search,
for peace to come inside.
for that silver lining,
so i don't have to hide.

crouched in fear,
not knowing what to do.
looking for that rainbow,
that's found inside of you.

me.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 1999-11-17 05:36 PM

Loved this Mojar. Especially the twist at the end!! I gotta say everytime I read your name it reminds me of 'Mr. Mojo Rising' from the Doors. Just thought I'd tell you that!!

Great job.

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

mojar
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa

2 posted 1999-11-17 06:08 PM

thank you, the name is a combination of my two youngest kids, mackenzie (mo) and jared (jar) i recently found this site by accident and it just blows me away every day.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-11-17 09:31 PM

This is a very sweet poem....the rhyme and rhythm is good...and the ending was just really sweet.....

I too found this site by chance.....what a wonderful day that was.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

4 posted 1999-11-18 01:53 AM

This is a great read...wonderful work. I can almost hear the thunder echoing in my ears and feel the rain on my face.

Love the ending....
"looking for that rainbow
found inside of you".... beautiful...
just beautiful.

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

5 posted 1999-11-18 09:31 AM

I do so love the storm works.

DB

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And if the band you're in starts playin' different tunes,
I'll see you on the dark side of the moon.
==P. Floyd==

mojar
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa

6 posted 1999-11-18 12:03 PM

thank all of you, this is one of my favorite pieces.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 1999-11-19 02:30 AM

I always find a glimmer of hope in your work, mojar. Love this one.

michael

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