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Yoin
Junior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 29

0 posted 1999-11-09 06:23 PM

A lost maple oddball,
hard backed with chew marks
from my old dog.
Saved from a dumpster death
in my poorer days.

By the window it waits
to awkwardly wobble,
in an attempt to rock me
while I sit and weep.

Yoin

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

1 posted 1999-11-09 07:49 PM

I like this, but I don't see how it fits into Dark Passions?

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 1999-11-09 08:14 PM

Very well done, Yoin. A nice melancholy overtone. Welcome to Dark Passions.

Sys, I don't see how you question this piece belonging here. It is Dark and completely futile in nature.

Michael

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

3 posted 1999-11-09 08:21 PM

Sorry Amy but I have to agree with Micheal this is dark and does belong here just look at the last line its great.
Welcome to the family. please post many many more

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life is short kill quick

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

4 posted 1999-11-09 08:34 PM

It belongs... Well done

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

5 posted 1999-11-10 04:46 AM

Nicely done.Enjoyed the read.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

6 posted 1999-11-10 02:22 PM

I like this much.

been both the maple oddball and the weeper.

Nice,Y.

DB

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September 30, 1659. I, poor, miserable Robinson Crusoe, being shipwrecked, during a dreadful storm in the offing, came ashore on this dismal unfortunate island, which I called "the Island of Despair," all the rest of the ship's company being drowned, and myself almost dead.
----Robinson Crusoe----
==Daniel DeFoe==

Yoin
Junior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 29

7 posted 1999-11-10 03:17 PM

Thanks everyone for your kind words on my poem. I believe most of my work will fit in here at Dark Passions since most if of the darker nature. I am going to like it here, who wouldn't with all this great poetry to read!

Thanks again

Yoin

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

8 posted 1999-11-11 08:30 AM

Enjoyed the read!!

Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

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