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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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ONE You tower above us, a tsunami shadowing feeble sand castles of hope along the shores of misguided trust. One, you rise above us all the incarnation of Hate. Wrath, fire, and fury blistering through eyes set deep in madness - with a single motion scattered amongst the rocks, we fall, now, merely pieces of souls. Then you're gone. Gliding cleanly away into seas of tranquility while ravaged in the remnants of your ire torn flesh, (flesh of you), desperately tries to fuse itself into unity. There, with your great shadow once again rearing it's face at the very heart of hope, we know all too well the consequences of our sin. ------------------ Michael Anderson 4/26/99 And so, being young and dipt in folly I fell in love with melancholy, But dreams - of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned, and die: EAP [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-21-1999).] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Very dark ... the imagery pulled me in on this one, had to read it three or four times before I could tear myself away ... Engaging. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, When you plant symbols they will flower different for each person. I personally liked the poem. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I liked this very much, lot of deep thought here. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Michael, I dont know how I missed this one...but I really felt the emotion...I loved the phrase, " pieces of souls..." Very magical just like you. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
A vengeful and malificent God walks your dreams, Michael. I hope for all of our sakes he's illusory...but I'm afraid you might be right. Still building those sand castles in the face of destruction, DB |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, Deep Blue, that a vengeful god walks my dreams there is no doubt. However, this work is about three frightened children trying to find idendity within themselves and within each other in the eyes of an extremely abusive mother. Yes, I am still building those sand castles, but I still see that shadow too. Michael |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
I'm so sorry and sad. I've known several in this situation and it's carried all the way to the crux of their being even now. DB |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Dark and deep.....liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Micheal, i love this! Your free verse is exquisite! Might you oblige me by posting more free verse? ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Strength, wisdom, punishment, darkly alluring to me Michael.  ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
You do indeed write free verse well my friend. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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