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Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-10-26 01:06 AM

Etched in the cold silver of moonlight,
There lies a pair of lovers.
They kiss, caress, undress.
The scent of ecstasy fills the air.

A beast lurks in the nearby woods.
A predator unseen
Sniffs the metallic air
And licks parched lips.

Underbrush breaks under foot, and it runs
With a wild need to murder.
The lovers see a movement
Beyond their world of lust

Eyes wide and mouths agape
They huddle in shock
The beast runs faster
and spittle runs down its chin

The beast screams hatred and fury
While the lovers hug one last time
the woman's milk white skin
Pressed against the mans quivering frame

The beast draws the gun
And he shoot his wife and her lover
His vengeance had,
He the puts the pistol in his mouth

This was never meant to be

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

1 posted 1999-10-26 03:29 AM

Guess not!

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-26 09:10 AM

Excellent! Loved the twist at the end.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

3 posted 1999-10-26 11:22 AM

Wow girl...loved the twist at the end

Jenny

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-10-26 07:30 PM

Excellent twist to the end.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

5 posted 1999-10-26 08:32 PM

Thanks everyone. This is one of the few things I've written that is entirely fictional.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

6 posted 1999-10-26 09:16 PM

Great work Amy at first I thought this would be a love poem that would depress me further but that idea was soon banished. Great end great poem great poet

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life is short kill quick

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 1999-10-28 05:06 AM

Good job, Sys...the ending really caught me off guard, guess there won't be a sequal here, huh?

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

8 posted 1999-10-28 02:36 PM

Nope, Micheal, 'fraid not.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

D.B. Whyte
Member

since 1999-10-27

Posts 94
Crest Hill, IL, USA

9 posted 1999-10-28 10:24 PM

Old, old story but fully meated and throaty. You've gotta love this theme. Thanks for your angle, I thoroughly enjoyed this.

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