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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This is the fantasy world in which she exists She claims to do everything, and then do it more She decieves with words, commands with fists She acts like a dog, but don't you dare call her a whore She claims to do everything, and then do it more She'll screw anything that moves, put drugs in her eyes She acts like a dog, but don't you dare call her a whore Nobody else sees through her flimsy lies She'll screw anything that moves, put drugs in her eyes If her world was reality, she'd already be dead Nobody else sees through her flimsy lies She thrives upon sympathetic tears for her, shed If her world was reality she'd already be dead I played along, to avoid provoking her rage She thrives upon sympathetic tears for her, shed I sobbed pityingly for her, a rat in her cage I played along, to avoid provoking her rage I was the voice that made everyone hear her song I sobbed pityingly for her, a rat in her cage When she was done with me, I was left in the dust where I belong I was the voice that made everyone hear her song She decieves with words, commands with fists When she was done with me, I was left in the dust where I belong This is the fantasy world in which she exists -I changed just one word, to make it clearer, Because I wanted to make sure veryone knew that I was the rat in the cage not her... ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- [This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-22-1999).] [This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-22-1999).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Knowing something of the inspiration for this, I must say that you expressed it well. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Well Done Sweet Girl  Jenny  |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
The road ahead is going to be tough,but I know your tougher.Excellent work here! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
This was sooooo good SYSTEM. I have enjoyed reading your works .....they are awe inspiring, emotional, painfilled and heartfelt. Keep up the fantastic work. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very well done, Sys, although if my world were reality I'd probably be dead too. I could feel emotion rushing the gates of Sanity in this one. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP. Great poem sys. Very great. she is a which who will be burned. ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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Midniteyez Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 20Soldotna, Alaska USA |
I like =) |
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DreadedOne Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 51Odessa, TX |
This is intense...I likes. Dread |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Well worth the dig. Let's give this another spin. I am inspired. DB |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Well, I forgot to thank everyone the first time around, so thanks, and thanks Deep Blue for digging this abck up. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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