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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Cabalistic frenzied feeding evil sweats ‘neath it's own ill laughter raucous never-ending devour quick not slow nor still time stares down no crystal halls where faith shatters fragile souls e'en noble bravery falls crossed ‘gainst balanced poles malice kindness anger bliss god's blessing satan's kiss mankind grasping for happiness a failure borne with expected miss pallid hue of twilight heart argent blaze of emaciation emerald eyes of hate impart no hope for emancipation [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 12-26-1999).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Dude! You totally rocked man! Righteous slice of the deeper Dark within and without, crafted you have. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Christopher~~~ WOW!!! Killer piece, my friend! ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Chris, this is a wonderful piece. Even in my dizzy, half asleep state, the poem flowed quickly and wouldn't have let me quit reading even if I had wanted to....which I didn't  Structure aside, I thought it to be a wonderful depiction of society today. Great work. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
See? What did I say: I knew it was fantastic before I even read it! You know - I really love the way you crafted this line: god's blessing satan's kiss. I also think it works really well in the middle of the piece - it's quite symbolic. Faith shattering souls - how? Do you mean LOSS of faith - because faith, even if it is misplaced, nourishes - deliberate paradox here? You have achieved your most desired end - producing thought!! Bravo, my dove! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Pallid hue of twilight heart...awesome. Jenny |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Fabulous Wolf!!! Loved this! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah man....this is AWESOME, totally rocks. You have once again totally blown my mind! ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
... and behold, he hath created sculpture with words. Excellent work, my friend. --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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