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Dark Poetry #1

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elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

0 posted 1999-08-19 05:36 AM

[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 1999-08-20 01:27 AM

I really liked this! Very original form in which you wrote this! I liked your pattern, and how you expressed your "thoughts"...Pulled it together nicely in the end too....!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Majere
Junior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 32

2 posted 1999-08-20 01:40 PM

Hmmmm.... almost sounded like my conversations with my own mind...

Well done!

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Such is the way to immortality ;)

MEL-MEL
New Member

since 1999-08-21

Posts 3
Chicago

3 posted 1999-08-21 05:26 PM

putting dialogue in a poem really impacts the reader. great job!!!!

moonmoon
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 277
TX , USA

4 posted 1999-08-22 12:39 PM

Good job Elvira..

"I am wondering what it will take
to silence this overactive mind
and finally get some sleep"
WOW..You sure, you're not me??

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr

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