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Midniteyez
Junior Member

since 1999-10-15

Posts 20
Soldotna, Alaska USA

0 posted 1999-10-16 11:50 PM

Fallen Angel
Dreamer of dreams
Come to me gently
as in the night I breath
Weave for me a web
delicate but strong
Entrap me with your kisses
Caress me with your songs
Let me feel once again
your hands, your lips, your tongue
Let it not only be with passion
but a melisma of love
Bring to me your warmth
Walk within my mind
Know my soul completely
Release these chains that bind
Take me from this place
where alone the emptiness grows
Where visions of two are not enough
and I hear whispers when the wind blows
Walk with me and speak of love
Within my dreams I can believe
I feel your touch, your body close
and it seems so real to me
Right or wrong, it matters not
only flesh against flesh so warm
Flashes of color, sight and sound
in a relam where reality is torn
Cover me and whisper
until I feel your breath on my neck
Make me gasp and scream your name
twisted in sheets so wet
Bits and pieces floating down
on the the waves it does ride
Only until I sleep again
Midnight dreams another time
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Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

1 posted 1999-10-17 02:29 AM

I like this poem very much, but might I suggest you break up the lines into stanzas to make for easier reading?

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Lucie
Senior Member

since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

2 posted 1999-10-17 10:53 AM

I don't frequent this forum often, but I truly enjoyed this read.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

3 posted 1999-10-17 11:53 AM

I politely agree w/Sys

If you break the verse into stanzas it would be much easier to read Good Though!!

Jenny

Midniteyez
Junior Member

since 1999-10-15

Posts 20
Soldotna, Alaska USA

4 posted 1999-10-17 02:29 PM

Thank you for your advice. I will try just that =)

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

5 posted 1999-10-19 03:18 AM

Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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