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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Your heart a landmine Your soul worn Your past a crime Your future torn Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
You encapsulate so much here!!! With so few words you provoked so many feelings! I love your style  |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i also like your style of short expression. and this is a very good poem i like it alot. it kind of states that even if you doing something wrong and do time for it in any sense some people still hold you to your crime and can't see people do make mistakes. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Thanks Tara! Jeremiah, This was actually meant to be about a neglected, unloved and defenceless kid that gets pushed around by adults until it's an emotial wreck. But it's my opinion that a poem means what the individual reader understands/sees, not what the author really meant. Thanks for your comments, it's always good to hear what others see in your work! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Only 4 lines...and yet you captured a lifetime. How brilliant!! Hardrock |
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