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Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

0 posted 1999-10-13 01:32 AM

A child quietly sobbing
huddled low in the corner.
Hating his life
wishing it all away.
Closing off all contact
no one to help or defend him.
He tries to forget
the laughter and the smiles.
The faces burned
deep into his conscience.
He wants them to feel
the pain and torment.
As time begins to pass
he blocks it and forgets.

He stand and cleans up
dusting himself off
drying his eyes.
He steps outside
and accepts the beatings.
He begins to believe
it was right.

I watch him walk away
slowly and indignant
and I realize....

I am remembering.

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Deverone

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-13 07:29 AM

Horrible thing for a child to endure much less alone.Well done verse.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

2 posted 1999-10-21 01:12 PM

This is probly one of the most painful pieces I've written and there was virtually little notice.

Thank you for the comments Watcher666.
Your words are appreciated.

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

3 posted 1999-10-21 05:47 PM

Angst filled words here.
As time begins to pass
and blocks it and forgets.
Such a tragic thing,but good to remember and
then dispose of......waiting to read more of your work.

Jenny

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

4 posted 1999-10-21 05:49 PM

Makes me remember my earlier childhood. Great poem i felt the pain of many from your words

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life is short kill quick

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

5 posted 1999-10-21 07:09 PM

Wow! I've never been able to write such a powerful poem, i'm envious! keep writing 'em because it's your gift! :0)

ashley

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If you love something let it go, if it comes back to you it's yours, if it doesnt then it never was"

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 1999-10-21 08:15 PM

Wow! is right...Indeed a powerful piece, Deveron. I have suffered flashbacks from what I once thougt an uneventful past. A truly horrific experience...very well done.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?

Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

7 posted 1999-10-21 08:17 PM

Thank you everyone.

Please don't think that I was tooting a horn......but I have read a lot of good pieces by other people that get pushed to the back real fast because some people are so quick to post their works without reading others........I've been trying to read first then post ...if I want to post anything at that time.....trying to keep giving encouragement to others for their wonderful works also.

Like I said please don't get me wrong.

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---

wolfie97
Member

since 1999-10-18

Posts 58
Newcastle, WY USA

8 posted 1999-10-21 08:54 PM

WOW! That really hit close to home. Very good! This one will definately stay with me. Hard, emotionally to read for me, it was very well done.

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Garrett 'sneaky' Gall

Arcane Chaos
New Member

since 1999-10-18

Posts 6
Coral Springs, FL, Broward

9 posted 1999-10-23 04:10 PM

Powerful poem, hits me dead on, gets my blood boiling just reading it.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

10 posted 1999-10-23 05:32 PM

Very powerful words here Deverone. Good job.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Blue Eyed Wanderer
Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 84
Rhode Island, US

11 posted 1999-10-23 10:52 PM

Wow. I loved this...it was so great! You can't describe me any better than that! I've been there, forgotten about it, and still dealing with the flashbacks. Thanks for sharing this!

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

12 posted 1999-11-30 03:55 AM

Deverone, I have no idea how the thread to this piece got locked. Here is the original post, "unlocked", complete with replies. I deleted your repost as i am bring this back to the top. Still one of my favorite posts from you.

michael

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