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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
ABUSE We saw the red strands of sadness in his eyes When the dog ran away. He kicked it and battered it until it just couldn't stay. It would leap in joy whenever no one was around. But when Johnny came out~ it slowly dropped to the ground. It was too sick and tired~ and was nearly lame. But Johnny pressed on~ controller! Master of all the dogs~ That's what he wanted to be; To get away from his parents~ and to somehow be free~ Free from their fists,from their screams and the pain. "And free from their hate," Johnny said, as he slapped him again. That dog understood as he took every blow~ And knew that someday he would just have to go. One day Johnny got into a spat~ He came looking for his dog with a big baseball bat.~ To relieve his frustrations~ To relieve all his pain; But all that was left was a leash and a chain. Yes, we saw the red strands of sadness in his eyes~ When the dog ran away. It got tired of hurting, and was too sick to play. |
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Lindsay Kaznowski Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 23 |
~Mario~ Such a sad, yet great poem. I mostly like this part of your poem-- "He came looking for his dog with a big baseball bat.~ To relieve his frustrations~ To relieve all his pain; But all that was left was a leash and a chain." I think your a very good writter,and wish more hope in the future. -Princess |
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Cat Junior Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 12 |
. [This message has been edited by Cat (edited 05-28-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~*Sigh*,...wow. This piece speaks a message loud and clear. What a terrible situation. What a truly sad poem. You have done well however in your expression....very well. *Peace. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Mario, again you have moved me. Your sensitivity is so refreshing and your poems always have a valuable lesson in them. I nearly cried again for both dog and boy. Thanks for bringing another view or opinion here into dark, it is certainly welcome  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I have releaved a few masters of there burden animals. and I didn't even leave the chains. took them to. hahaha I can't stand a person that will beat a dog. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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traveling heart Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 26 |
Mario, I was just about to write an ode to my dog Rowdie, whom I miss so much 4 years after her having to be put to sleep. She was a battered dog that I dog-napped and she was never healthy, dying at an age of 6 from kidney failure, but the time we had was the happy conclusion to your poem. I think I will write mine now... Thanks for the inspiration... TH |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Mario This is so sad, so touching, yet so painfully real. We are aware that these things happen often, yet we prefer to push them out of our minds rather than do anything about it. I like Joel's approach  Thanks for reminding us of the injustice of the circle of hate. A great, powerful poem. Sylvia |
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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
Hello everyone, Thanks for all the kind words towards this poem, I based this one an experiance I once was introduced to when a neighbor did this to his dog just to relieve his frustrations. Thanks again, and glad I could help. always Mario22 |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Mario this is amazing. Very original,i have never in my life seen a poem about this subject and i think it's wonderful!! You did a great job of describing!! i once rescued a cat from a like situation....she was pregnant and not being fed at all....plus not being treated very well. It's so sad......the way i see it animals and humans were put here to share the earth and i think it's a real shame when a human decides he has some kind of power and control over an animal and can do whatever he wants. So sad,but well put in your poem!! swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
great poem and look at both sides but I myself find animal abuse horrid blue to the rescue |
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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
Hello guys, Thanks for responding to my poem I am glad you all liked it I tried to look at it both ways which there is .. yes the cruelty to animals and there is also a message of a little boy having problems with his parents fighting and this is the only way he can take his anger out. Again thanks everyone. always Mario22 |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
ah, so much said here... if only we could hide the fear... if only some one would hear... if only all had eyes as the dogs do... if only abuse were not so casual... There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
Excellent portrayal of the cycle of abuse. It does carry on, in just this way. Frustration begets itself, as does hatred, coldness, and love. I can only hope you intended some message to be construed for Johnny... perhaps he got away? I would love to see a sequel here. But me, I am all for a happy ending |
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