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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Dark Lady stands at a cliff, about to fly. Stands there thinking,body stiff. Wants to die. She's on the edge. Pale & Sickly in a bed of vomit, she's so fat. Hates herself,hates the world,wants to bomb it. She'll die,she knows that. She's on the edge. He's a Lonely Shadow with a knife, about to let it go. Cut out the rest of his life. Wants to see it flow. He's on the edge. Beauty Queen with a medicine cabinet, she's so sad. Daddy has a bad habit. She'll die,she's glad. She's on the edge. He's 75 today,with a gun, about to fill his mind with lead. Wife is gone,friends are none. Wants to be dead. He's on the edge. Hungry girl on a bridge over ocean, she's so tired. No food,no job.Sick of going through the motions. Need for rest is dire. She's on the edge. We only ask them why AFTER they do it. Why not before? Because we never notice,or don't want to go through it? Don't bother to help heal the sore. Maybe we're on the edge too. When we finally do ask why, the answer is the same. WHY? They ask it too,before they say goodbye. Ask why the world is pain. Why? Why are we all on the edge of death? < !signature--> And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson [This message has been edited by Swåmp¤Faerÿie (edited 05-13-2000).] |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
He's a Lonely Shadow with a knife, about to let it go. Cut out the rest of his life. Wants to see it flow. He's on the edge. ******* Sometime I feel like I'm "on the edge" to. I fear one day I'll find the curage to jump off it. I really liked this piece, it made me think, I like that. Take care you.~Broken~  "Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering fearing, Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before; But the silence was unbroken, and the stillness gave no token" ~Edgar Allan Poe (1809-1849) "The Raven" |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I've been on this edge before, with the lead just grains of presser on the trigger, My spirit cried out, and said why, My soul said live, I listened. Glad I did. This was too close to home but I answered any way. If you get to this edge, and need a reason not to jump, call me. (209) 736-0572. PST. Late Eve. Or E me. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Somewhere i read that "the mass of men live their lives in quiet desparation". Maybe the greatest success any of us have is to survive ourselves as we struggle with the circumstances of our lives. Maybe the answer is to just "keep passing the open windows". ~~thought your verse was well written~~ dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Thanks all for the comments =]it's a comfort =] Broken- the shadow named here is a friend of mine. I've listed several of my acquantinces here...including myself...i'm the dark lady ready to fly,but the wind always holds me back. I have the courage to let it go,in fact it would happen in a minute,but i have 3 good reasons to stay on earth. And i will NOT allow myself to comprimise my purposes. Joel- Thank you for your support. Just knowing you offered is enuf to comfort me.=] i thank you =] Danny- You hit the nail on the head!! Thank you also for your words of wisdom =] thank you all so much. You are a great comfort to me =] swamp faeryie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Swamp,....I think this one hurt. It's been too real a read for me. Thank you for expressing and sharing this piece. Very well done. *Peace. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Thank you SpitFire,i'm sorry this hits close to home for you,but thank you for your comments =] swamp¤ And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Bronx Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84Oviedo, Florida, U.S. |
hey- I loved this poem! I especially liked the last 2 paragraphs. They made me realize that sometimes people don't get help because they can't...now adays no one's willing to give it to someone. Often times they don't even know anything is wrong...it's sad actually. bye Bronx Be careful! It's a jungle out there! |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Yes Bronx....it is strange. Myself,when i want someone to notice i'm on the edge or feeling down,they don't. And when i don't want them to notice....they do...LOL....life is so...contrary isn't it??¿ =] Thanks for your words!! =] faeryie of the swamplands And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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