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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Tentative grasp of emotions raw. Tears constantly Treatening to overcome. A heart Dying with silent screams None left to hear... to see... to care... Lost to the Abyss of hopeless dreams Lost... in the midst of Silent Screams. [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 05-08-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Marilyn my sis, this is wonderful work. The screams are silent to others but deafening to oneself. Are you on downer hon, or just venting? Email me if you need to talk. *hugs* At last I have heard the song of enlightenment.... In your heart you can hear it now, if you listen.... It is the song your spirit has been singing since the moment of your birth. All lasting victories are won in the heart.... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
This pierces to the core Marilyn... Harsh, desperate, hopeless.. This one captures myself frighteningly well. You definetly called some tears here, my friend. *HUGS* Abrahm Simons "You... You are so special You have the talent To make me feel like Dirt" - Alice in Chains, "Dirt" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I know what those silent screams are like Marilyn. HUGS Denise |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~"of emotions raw"....Raw is exactly how this poem came across to me. Great expression...yet scary to have your mouth open wide trying so desperatley to release what's inside and have not a sound escape....even if it just a metaphor here,...I liked this poem tons  |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I've tried silent screams, but it always comes out as howls. but i know what you mean, lost in a hell of screams no one hears. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Effective work here. I've done a poem or two about silent screams, but they don't compare to this one. I enjoyed it. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Marilyn This is awesome. Raw talent, raw emotion. We feel with you, but stand back for your talent. Great stuff! Sylvia |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thankyou all for your replies. Lisa...your thoughts and your concern means more to me then you will ever know. Love you my sister! Abe...You know exactly where this is coming from and I know you can relate to my words. That in itself is a comfort. Tempress.....You forget that I have seen your work my friend. I would not call your attempts at such poems as failures. We all create differently and this piece just wrote itself. I took up my pen in the midst of my torment and this is what transpired. Never stop writing for you are very good my friend. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
This one gave me goose bumps. Very well done. It reminded me of one I posted a while a go called The Misery Of Woe. You managed to capture the same feeling but with fewer words. Bravo! Thank you for sharing this. I look forward to seeing more of your work or you could e-mail some to me, please.  G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
Marilyn....such a pondering poem! The kind that makes you read slowly and think of oneself! Those are the best to me. It made me reach in deep.....your gifted work showed me how! Thanks! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marilyn~"Lost to the Abyss of hopeless dreams" oh I have felt this! What an excellent poem.-SEA |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Mr. Webb...Thankyou so much for your compliment. I believe you have managed to make me blush.  Illusion...I am very glad that you have to look deep inside yourself when you read this. I was pouring out the innermost me when I wrote it. SEA....Well there was a reason why I liked you so much when I fist read you. We seem to have walked much of the same ground. I hope all went well with you the other day. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
VERY well done, and effective. I thought it was just great! A heart Dying with silent screams... Lost to the Abyss of hopeless dreams... Absolute poetry, my lady, pure and beautiful! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marilyn~ the feelings go both ways! Yes, things went fine for me yesterday, It went much faster than I had hoped. Thank you for asking. -SEA |
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Strosek Member
since 2000-04-08
Posts 61Fourways, Gauteng, South Africa |
Marilyn, great poem, touches deep within the heart and soul. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
This is great. Silent screams...How do I know how it feels.... |
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