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In the Park at Twilight
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In the Park at Twilight |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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In the park at twilight I do not understand But then you run to me and take me by the hand YOu lead me to the swings You say "push me" when I hesitate you look at me and ask "What's wrong Mommy" I look into your eyes Eyes that match my own They twinkle as they tell me What I've secretly known My little angel has come to me It's time for us to play Something that could never happen In the light of Day We play on the see-saws Spin on the merry go round Your laughter tinkling in the air Such a beautiful sound I stroke your hair and Hold you tightly next to me You snuggle in so nice and warm This is how it was supposed to be Slowly you start to fade away You blow a kiss goodbye I beg for you to stay As a tear falls from my eye You whisper you'll be back And it's carried on the breeze Sobbing now on the ground Begging on my knees I want to dream and never wake up For, thats when you come to me My precious darling My angel baby Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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michellemckee Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 49Tucson, AZ |
Wow. This poem has brought a serious visual to my mind and a catch to my breath. As someone who has given a child up for adoption in my younger and not so good days this hits so close to home! Thank you for the smile and the knowledge that I am not alone! Someday we will all swing together on the playground! Michelle |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Starr, I can feel your pain in this one. . .it's heartaching. . . you tell the story with such simple beauty. . . makes me think. . . Wonderful poem my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
StarrGazer, as a mother I share your pain. Nice to imagine being with them and playing with them. I miscarried a daughter so I know your pain hon, my daughter would be 6 this year. Some believe they continue to age and grow up in heaven. *hugs* this brought tears to my eyes, for I know the pain... I have a small home made memorial for my daughter in my back yard, with a little plaque under the jacaranda tree, I go and sit there to feel close to her. If you ever need to talk you know where I am hon... A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Thanks for the comments you guyz,... Isis this was about my son, I miscarried when I was 5 months and he would have been 4 on April 23rd and every year I write some kind of little tribute to him this it the one for this year |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Starr, my heart to you kid. I have lost so many. I've said this before, "They still know we love them" "And they love us back" Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Starr~ I hope your dreams never end, sounds like he often reaches you this way. Isis said that some believe that they continue to age and grow this is my belief and one day you will be with him again and your dream will have just begun. Sweet dreams Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 04-29-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was a beautiful, moving piece. God bless you Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Joel, Tracie, Irish thanks for your replies Tracie- I believe that they continue to age, my dreams made me a believer of that I no longer dream of a baby I dream of a little boy and sometimes it is so real I think he really truly does come to me in my dreams, because I can see him grow and just like my other children I end up thinking to myself ...they get big way too fast ! and one day we'll all be together  |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
great work...very painful though still beautiful take care If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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