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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
The Searing touch I received Taken everything I have Drained me of all feelings, leaving me cold Leaving me with these Pathetic Tears To weak to get up, The serrated blade ruthlessly slices Cuts my soul, ripping my heart Feeling everything a thousand fold Reduced to a hollow vessel, retreating within Cold, unbearably cold. The warmth has been purged Alone in the familiar darkened corner, shaking Freezing tears flow down my face, feeling my heart slowing The Ice cold grip, can’t breath, the tears fall faster Pathetic Tears is all I have left, Broken and Unwanted Withering away, the light dimming I gave and gave, received Pain and Unbearable sadness Slipping back into the Void of depression, where I belong The Jar broken, fire gone, hope killed, dreams fled waiting in the cold void, for a merciful release The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Daniel, great piece!! But tell me, are all tears pathetic? Or only this sort? Tears wash away the cobwebs of the heart  A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
Oh my! The pain is expressed with phenominal imagery. This is well done! Without darkness there is no light Without the light we cannot see the dark Balance...It heals the soul -- by: LB |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh, precious tears, because each one is a drop of pain that needs to fall to make room for tears of joy Kathleen |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~D...vividly written with such emotion...I loved it. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Isis, the tears I shed were always called Pathetic, but I have come to relize it not so. For those were the last I will shed from pain like that. No More will I take the abuse from "friends" Lady, thank you for the very kind words Irish, I love those words..and they have helped me through this more than you will know..thank you so much. Spitfire, I'm glad you liked it...and hope you never feel this way The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
My friend the feelings here are heartfelt and this is a great poem for the sad heart. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
d~ such a saddness and lonliness here in this and I can only give my love and a HUG and hopefully brighten your day a little with a net Love always Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
God how I can relate to this one, Daniel. "gave and gave", indeed. You paint the portrait perfectly, my friend. Michael |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Dhuron... On familiar grounds... great poem... just keep writing...and remember... someone will not just read or go through... but will feel too If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
This is a wonderfuly written poem,and very touching....When i cry pathetic tears full of every bit of pain in my mind and body,i always feel better after i'm done crying.....i hope it's much the same with you =] creature And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
This is so touching and oh so familiar. I feel with you, but do not claim to know exactly how you feel. Allow yourself to feel, but never allow others to take all of you. Keep writing. This is beautiful. A HUG and a  ) for you. |
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