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Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-10-07 02:11 AM

The predators eyes
Shimmer as he waits
Diamonds in the darkness
Following his prey

It's a little lamb
Young and innocent
Unknowingly he strolls
Thinks nothing of repent

This infuritaes the carnivore
It really makes him mad
Even though the little lamb
Has done nothing bad

"He will bow before me,
I will make him pay,"
The vicious animal calls out
"Come here little lamb, let's play."

The trusting lamb comes over
He knows nothing of fear
He peers into the bushes
There is a whisper in his ear

"Ungrateful sinner,
Your time here is done"
The little lamb squeals in pain
As the beast has its fun

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

1 posted 1999-10-07 02:52 AM

Love the play of evil over innocence.Good reading.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

2 posted 1999-10-07 09:21 PM

You changed it a little since I first read it awhile ago but it is still very good if not better

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life is short kill quick

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 1999-10-07 10:09 PM

Wow,
So much said here. I've really come to enjoy your work, SYS, your on quite a roll...keep it up.

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Michael Anderson

When God puts a tear in your eye,
He puts a rainbow in your heart.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-10-07 10:29 PM

My friend, your Darkside rocks.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

5 posted 1999-10-08 08:36 AM

Awesome Sys!!!
Your words get better and better.
Love the read!!

Jenny

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

6 posted 1999-10-08 02:36 PM

Thanks everyone for your replies. Jenny, this is actually one of the first poems I ever wrote. Of course I had to modify it a bit, because most of my early poetry sucks.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

7 posted 1999-10-13 12:53 PM

Maybe your earlier poetry doesn't suck after-all

Jenny

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

8 posted 1999-10-13 10:37 AM

the world is two sides of the same mirror
as i see it it does reflect

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

9 posted 1999-11-16 02:46 PM

I'd find it hard to believe that, early or of late, anything you put out here "sucks."
You have the Muse's touch to all you do.

DB

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The little girl on the plane, who turned her doll's head around to look at me...
------Franny & Zooey------
===J.D. Salinger===

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