Dark Poetry #1 |
To my little chickadee... |
Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Hi yall, < !signature-->well guess what, i am back with another poem. this is a long one so i will keep the intro brief. this is a poem that i wrote for my girlfriend. i havent givin it to her yet. she is coming up on friday. *hopefully* and thats when i am giving it to her. but i wanted to see what yall thought of it first. so let me know what you think. thanks. well here goes nothing. To My Little Chickadee As I look out my window And stare at the stars I wonder how you could feel so close Yet live so far The day I finaly met you Is a day I will never forget For when you looked into my eyes A fire in my heart was lit As we laid in each others arms All snuggled in my bed I prayed to the lord above And this is what I said "Please lord grant me this one wish And please let it come true Let me spend the rest of my life with her And thats all I'll ever ask again from you" I can still remember The first time we kissed I fought off the urge to faint But it was hard to resist That kiss took my breath away It sent my heart all aflutter Then you looked in my eyes and said "I love you" And I melted just like butter Then on New Years Eve I gave you my ring I took you by the hand And asked you one thing Will you be mine forever Will you love me to the end of time You answered my question with a kiss That sent shivers down my spine But then a few weeks later We started to fight We said alot of hurtful things On that cold winters night That night I thought it was over That night I thought we were through I spent the rest of the night crying I didn't know what to do So I made some plans to go back home Plans that I thought were right I wish I could go back in time And change what I did that night Cuz a few days later we worked it out And our love was like brand new But I couldn't stop my friends from coming There was nothing I could do The night before I left you Was a sad night indeed But you held me in your arms and comforted me In my time of need Then you took my hand in yours And placed it on your heart You said I would always be in here So we will never be far apart Then just before I walked out the door I hugged you again And kissed you once more The pain in your eyes I could easly see Cuz the same pain that was running through you Was also running through me Now I am back at home A place where I thought I wanted to be But being in your arms Is the only home for me Its been almost two months Since I left your loving arms And returned to the cold sadness Of this lonley farm Then you said You would come up to visit I couldnt beleive it The timing is exquisite I am going to do now What I should have done then And as this poem Comes to its end As I stand before you With what I am about to do I have but one last question To ask of you Now look into my eyes And answer me Wanda, Will you marry me??? Jesse C. Jaymz Give me the beat boys and free my soul, i wanna get lost in your rock n roll, and drift away... ~Dobie Gray~ [This message has been edited by Isis (edited 04-19-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Jesse you know my heart, my fingers are crossed, love you bro!! Isis A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
isis *hugs* thanks hun. i am glad you like it. apprently its alittle to long for everyone else. no one else has replied to it. oh well. i know in my heart that its good. i just hope that i can give this to her. *prays* thanks sis for the spelling corrections too. *hugs* love ya sis Give me the beat boys and free my soul, i wanna get lost in your rock n roll, and drift away... ~Dobie Gray~ |
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DarkEnchantress's BF New Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 8 |
Wonderful poem Jesse! You expressed your emotions beautifully with this. I hope it all works out for you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I prayed to the Lord above and this is what I said, Please Lord grant me this one wish..and please let it come true. Let me spend the rest of my life with her..and thats all I'll ever ask again from you." I loved those lines...in fact I prayed similar prayers myself many times and one just recently and I know that I must keep praying so God will know my heart and I will be sure of my feelings. I don't mind long poems if they are interesting like yours and well written as this is. I have a good friend named Jesse and when we hang out they call us Jesse James. And good luck to you with this relationship. James |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Jess hon you are welcome bro!! I'll be thinking of you on Good Friday and typing with fingers crossed!! *hugs* A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey jesse, this is PERFECT...so full of your devotion and heart... I'll be wishing hoping and praying for ya too. good luck sweets. take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jesse~ How could she resist? Give it to her and she will surely melt, the words are just plain beautiful. Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Good luck my friend. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Thanks yall. this peom means alot to me. it is my first truly happy one in a long time. but this ending isnt so happpy. my girlfriend cant come up this weekend. she canceld at the last minute. so now i am left with a poem that i cant use. *sigh* i am very depressed right now. but reading all the positive feed back make me feel alittle better. i am going to cry myself to sleep now. thanks again. Do you bury me when I’m gone? Do you teach me while I’m here? Just as soon as I belong, Then it’s time I disappear... MetallicA "I disappear" |
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