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A pebble rides the tides...
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A pebble rides the tides... |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
A pebble rides the tides... A pebble in the oceans riding the waves... The tides roar announcing their arrival... Kissing the shore they withdraw...only to return And with the tide that flies it to the moon Dauntless though the waters unknown... Reaching for the stars...a million years away... A pebble riding the ocean waves... And not always can the tides be heard... But silence could speak a thousand words... The tides could draw it in and swallow... Could kill enthusiasm...leaving it hopeless.. Then crush it’s bones...making it weary... Still taking the chance...to go the distance... To explore the unknown...the unfamiliar... What lies ahead...and lost behind... Above the earth...still beneath the sky... A pebble rides the ocean waves...  heloo all this one is from the workshop... topic being "extended metaphor's" well i just wanted to try...so i went ahead If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
AVANTI, glad you tried. This turned out great. I can just see that little pebble getting lost in the waves.  Joy [This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Avanti~ I loved the images this put in my mind.-SEA |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
The pebble will have a hard time, angst insurmountable odds. the killer of enthusiasm, and the swallower of hope and crushing it all in one. All in All, good, and I mean that. Joel. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"But silence could speak a thousand words... " This line speaks a thousand words, my friend. Excellent poem. Michael |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanyou all i am gald i could send a messege through...we 're like that lil pebble and we can ride the tides... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kissing the shore they withdraw...only to return And with the tide that flies it to the moon Dauntless though the waters unknown... Reaching for the stars...a million years away... A pebble riding the ocean waves... And not always can the tides be heard... But silence could speak a thousand words... ------------------ this is just way too cool for school  this is excellent...perfect imagery and LOOOOVE those extended metaphors... i cut class that day LOL great job on this "van" later, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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