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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Secrets wrapped in mysters Bars around my heart I can only cause you misery Don't let the feelings start Tears under the guise of rain Half truths, but not lies Caring for me only brings pain In the end it will be you who crys I don't wan tto hurt you Don't let me in your heart Yet still I'm drawn to you Don't let the feelings start Maybe I'm too weak Unable to say goodbyes But listen when I speak In the end it will be you who crys Build bars around your heart Embrace the truth as a lie Don't let the feelings start In the end it will be you who crys Right now it's okay You call yourself a friend But it will happen one day And I already know the end "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Angel Usagi Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 11 |
Wow! You really captured it all! Great poem. Very moving. It's got me all choked up. ~*Angel Usagi*~ |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
StarrGazer~ Great poem!kinda sad though  do youreally think that you can only cause pain? I hope not its a powerful poem You did a good job on it ~Angie |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
This is the end, my only friend the end.. Hope you don't really feel this way hon, you don't kill every relationship that comes your way.. I can't believe that. Superb work!  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Starr. . . But it can never really be the end. . .but always a new beginning. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know, I feel the same in a lot of ways here. Like people are only setting themselves up for pain by caring about me. In some measure like I (although I want to) can never equal the love they're presenting me. Good poem, StarrGazer, really had me reflecting on this one. Michael |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Angel Usagi, just_another_fe, Isis, Sven, Michael - thanks for responding to my poem Now to answer the question "Do I really feel this way?" yes to some extent I do ... I'm wary of everyone, trying to figure out their hidden motives even in fact if none exist. I guess trust doesn't come easy and I don't really give it the chance. What is a relationship without trust but a heartache waiting to happen... and as Michael said I feel like I don't deserve the persons love or am not worthy of it and one day they'll see throught the illuison they have made of me and it will be them who is hurt because I've known all along I was not worthy and took their love anyway ... "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Great poem StarrGazer. I relate to the emotions all to well. I too find it hard to trust people. I also find it hard to belive that the ones that seem to love or like me just pretends to. Keep on writing, hug to you ~Broken I`m running out of time, I`m out of step and closing down, I never sleep for wanting hours the empty hours of greed. And uselessly always the need to feel again the real belief, of something more than mockery. If only I could fill my heart with love. -Robert Smith |
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ShadowHeart Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49 |
Great poem...this describes something really familiar though...don't know what. Good job! love always, shadowheart Love is our greatest weakness but when it's found, it's our greatest strength. |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
Starr, this was an EXCELLENT poem.....i feel this way always and with everyone...no matter how long or short of time i've known them...i just know i'll end up hurting them. **HUG** take care Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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thebeautybrat Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114Florida |
AWESOME POEM!!! I LOVED IT SOOOOO MUCH!! IT WAS VERY SAD BUT IT WAS WRITTEN VERY WELL!! HOPE TO SEE MORE OF YOUR WORK IN THE FUTURE! COME READ MY POEMS!! THEY'RE CALLED *tHe oNlY pLaCe I wAnT tO bE* AND *tHiS iS wHaT sOmE cAlL lOvE* FEEL FREE TO TELL ME YOUR COMMENTS TOO!! LOVE!! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
in the end you'll be left in tears...i already know the end... very close to my heart...it's a beautiful piece...see you around you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Broken- ((((hugz)))) thanks Shadow Heart - thanks Broken Wings- ((((hugz)))) thanks thebeautybrat- thanks going to check out your poems right after this post Avanti- thanks seems I am not the only one who knows the end there goes the idea of me being psychic LOL j/k glad you liked it Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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Veil_Gypsy Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 44Trapped in Veils of Starlight, and happy to be on my cosmic trail |
Darkly Enchanting , I also enjoy to wade in to the dark pool of the mind I get some of my tragic works from that muse, she favors you wonderful just wonderful poem!! Bravo!! Love Always  The Gypsy Bard She is like a cat in the dark and then she is your darkness....she rules her life like a bird in flight...Bard Gypsy |
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Virgo Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 46tx |
That was right on the money...so true to my own feelings about relationships....Great Poem. [This message has been edited by Virgo (edited 03-31-2000).] |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
hey Shan! well, hon, you've done it again!!! awesome poem! i know that feeling all too well...don't trust anyone and try to discourage love...always ends the same...maybe someday...well, here's hoping! great poem! love the repition, awesome effect... |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Gypsy, Virgo, Aiden ...Thanks you guyz Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is very open and honest writing. James |
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Malcolm Coleman Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 24United Kingdom |
Great poem, applies very much to me in my life right now, although in a slightly different way to how I imagine you intended. I really like a girl but I'm leaving the country in a month, so I don't want to get involved because I know it will have to end, and it'll only bring pain. I like the girl so I don't want to bring her pain, but I like her so I want to get involved. Your poem summed up the paradox I'm in nicely. Thank you very much ** It seems I've waited years for this day to end. - Ronan Harris Thanks for reading, hope you're still awake. |
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