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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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O come, thou children of the night And dance in Luna's silvered light: Tho' cursed or damned thou mayest be, Thine eyes shall see eternity Unfold before thee, timeless flower. Thy soul shall know no final hour When age or ill might steal thy breath; The shadow of impending death Shall never fall upon thy form. Thy face is flushed; thy lips are warm With blood of life -- the sacred taste That keeps thy flawless figure chaste Of ravages of age and time. Thy cause is just; thy need, sublime: For what is death but meager price -- A trifle, needful sacrifice -- A moment's salt upon thy tongue To keep thee fit, and ever young? But nay, thy heart is in thee still: Thou cannot live, thou cannot kill Without remorse. Thy humanity Is strong and deathless as are thee. With conscience art thou cursed and blessed, And love burns still within thy breast: What place has love in such an one? By thine own heart art thou undone. Companionship might yet be thine, But time flows swift! What wilt thou find But that the Death thou needs't not fear Has claimed the ones thou held as dear? Thy soul is sad, thine eyes are wet; Thy drink is bitter with regret: On life Eternal, once thy prize, Thou lookest now with haunted eyes. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, I must say that this is phenomenal. I am a great fan of vampires in general, but this is truly an excellent piece. I have one with a similar theme (although not nearly as good). Perhap's I'll post it here...  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
This was fabulous!Well written.I loved it!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
I am awestruck. TO DO LIST: 1) Add Vampyr to my favorite's list 2) Add Nochtdraco to my must read list ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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mister61 Junior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 41bergen county, nj |
To be honest, I don't particularly care for the subject matter, but this is so well written I felt compelled to keep reading. Very rich language. |
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Majere Junior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 32 |
WOW! I'm speechless - this was excellent! ------------------ Such is the way to immortality ;) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I thank all of you for your compliments ... this was one of my older poems, that I have revised over the years ... vampire mythology has always fascinated me ... but the thought of living forever is sobering if you look at it with a human heart ... ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Sobering? Perhaps not. I think vamyre lore has been studied in a defeatist's light. A human heart can endure, nay, flourish in the opportunity of eternity. The depths of feeling one's heart is capable of reaching, the height's of exhileration, the lows of sadness and depression, the continuing appreciation of the beauty of the existence... An eternity would be a continuing marvel, not the dreaded, morose existence so many would have us believe it to be. Carpe vitus! JP |
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jelliebabie New Member
since 1999-08-22
Posts 3Hong Kong |
"And from my life bludegoned hole, he sucks my heavy blood that twas formed by weary grace. Thus he lives another day and we are bound forever" you write with stunningly sorrowful eloquence |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Words to think on, JP ... an interesting perspective and one worth considering. Thank you all. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Loranth Junior Member
since 1999-08-24
Posts 19 |
reading this poem i can feel the power and streangth that would flow from one who is pretty much immortal. though the sadness at the end does make me think on the fact that man is not ment to live forever. and that our mortality is more of a blessing than a curse. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
For the lack of a better word I have only to say this poem is amazing. I've always been interested in vampyr lore which made the poem all the more captivating. Very well written and put together. ***Sadist Queen*** |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I have read this poem time and again and yet can't come up with due compliments. A truly exquisite piece. Michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Thank you all ... Michael, that is high praise ... Sometimes the darkness in our lives makes us appreciate the light that much more. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I only wish I had the skill to put into words such passion and deep feelings. This sort of piece, is the reason I write. You are the poet who inspires me. You, like few others, who can make not the mind, but the heart and soul absorb the words. Beautiful. Is an Encore to much to ask? ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot [This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 09-06-99).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I am literally stunnedinto silence. This poem is so expertly wrought, the rhyme and meter near perfect, the language exquisite and perfectly consistent throughout....I am fascinated by vampire lore too and this poem sent chills of wonder all down my spine. Wow! Stunned into silence I can only sit back and say again...wow! ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Littlewings Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 62 |
Your skill is truly great-so great I think you should focus your attentions on a more tangible subject matter. If you wrote a piece on something that most could relate to-The response would be twice as phenomenal. But I love you and I believe you are my soul-mate. Nochtdraco-review my stuff in critical analysis... |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
That was great poem....you said that sometimes the darkness in our lives makes us appreciate the light that much more....... I also believe that while that is true...sometimes the darkness in our lives warps us to the point where we can no longer enjoy the light......... "I used to be so big and strong, I used to know my right from wrong I used to never be afraid I used to be somebody I used to have something inside Now its just this hole thats open wide I used to want it all I used to be somebody." -Trent Reznor- |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
All the responses I have received to this piece have inspired me ... I think perhaps I shall endeavor to write a sequel ... "Dark shadows blur the edges of my sight ... But what is day without ensuing night?" Thanks again for all the positive feedback. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Nochtdraco, this has got to be one of the best pieces ever posted in this forum - if not the best. Thought I'd drag it back up for newer members to have a look. Michael |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
WOW!! This was amazing,your ability to use the old english is just stunning!!!!!!!What a wonderful,enigmatic peice of work!! WOW!! I think alot of dark souls are captivated by vampire legends,you certainly posted this in the right room!!!!! lol. What an aazing peice of work!! wow wow wow  I hope we see more vampire poems in dark passions!!swampie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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traveling heart Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 26 |
Very impressive indeed. Surprised at how much I enjoyed it as the subject matter does not have my full appreciation. I think it is one of the finest things I have ever read. TH |
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