Dark Poetry #1 |
Unheard Whispers |
ZuMBLe Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33 |
Unheard Whispers I smile to the world. But my heart silently cries to you "I want to be with you" "I want to take care of you" My heart's cries go unnoticed. The fire in my heart burns for you. But when I get close, The ice-walls of your fortress exstinguish the flame. Pain, disappointment and sadness set in. But soon the flame returns Only to be extinguished again by your ice. Is it warm inside your icy walls? I hope it's warm inside your icy walls. I wish I was inside your icy walls. My heart whispers to you silently. "Do you love me?" "Do you care?" "Why do you put up walls?" "Is it to keep me away?" Your sleeping heart does not answer my heart's questions. Pain, disappointment and sadness sets in. My silent fiery heart is dying now. Not because its want for you is fading. But because it sits next to your icy walls waiting. r.s. 1999 |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Welcome to Dark Passions ZuMBLe, a great poem to start off with, unrequited love..such a painful, the most! painful, feeling in the world...I truly hope that icy wall comes down.... dhuron |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Heartfelt first poem well done From Walter Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very touching and full of emotional longing. I hope for the best for you. James |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Welcome to Dark Passions Zumble...very good poem...so many questions and yet sometimes the answers don't bring your heart peace. I recommend trying to talk about it...and if not then try and get on with your life. I know it's hard....but it can be done as long as you try. And maybe your heart was meant for someone else...someone that will appreciate it. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
I really enjoyede this, the openning line are really affective. Well done. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ZuMBLe~ Welcome! I too have unheard whispers....... I really liked this poem. -SEA |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome to Passions, I too have unheard and unrealised whispers.. This was well written, full of longing There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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ZuMBLe Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33 |
Thank you all for the warm welcome.. I'm glad you enjoyed my work as I do enjoy all yours. Zum |
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Virgo Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 46tx |
I've had those icy walls put up before and I can honestly say that it can be difficult to break them down...just be patient...that person will eventually get the picture. |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Zumble~ what more can be said great work and i hope the wall comes down soon. Sometimes it really does come down ~Angie |
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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
Wonderful poem, Zumble. Great writing. |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
beautiful piece, my friend! welcome to passions! i hope you are rewarded for being his penelope, my dear. i hope he's worthy of you! i know that waiting...you've used such beautifully tragic imagery...i love this piece. great job! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Welcome to Dark Passions Great first post!! Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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