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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio 
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hello yall. its been a long time since i posted a poem. and it feels good to write again. this poem is about an ex-girlfrind. a person who i truly loved with all my heart. but my life got tough and i had to let her go. i e-mailed her. she never e-mailed me back. i was crushed. that was 5 months ago. i ran into her the other day and i asked her some questions. well i got my answers. she said that i was just a thing and that she never loved me. that hurt hard. looks like i made the right choice when i choose to leave her. i have a new girlfrind now and i love her with all my soul. but when my ex said that to me the other day all i could do was cry. so i did what i do best. i wrote about it. well i have babbled this intro long enough. just wanted to give yall some info on it. tell me what yall think. thanks!! TRUE COLOURS I thought that you loved me But I guess i was wrong All you did was use me And lead me along To you I was a puppet To use in your litte game But now thanks to you My soul will never be the same I thought I could trust you So I gave you my heart But all you did was crush it And rip it apart How could I be so blind Not to see what was going on You never really loved me You just used me like a pawn But I just fell into your trap You just lead me right along Hypnotizing my senses With your sweet sirein's song But it took a death For me to finaly see What the hell You were doing to me I was in tears, I was deppressed I was very very down I came to you for help But you were never around That day is what finaly Opened up my eyes And I seen what you were telling me Was just a pack of lies I can't wait for the day So I can see Someone use you Like you used me And then you will look around For somebody to care But all you'll have will be loneliness Cuz no one will be there And then when it feels like a knife sliced threw your heart A pain that thats all to real Then you will finaly know the pain That you made me feel... Jesse C Jaymz All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Jesse, loves wounds know know time, this was great could really feel the emotions behind the words good job! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
it's a beautiful sad full of hurt..... love it....nice to see you writing again  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sweet jesse, im SO glad your both back here and writing again... with the flow of ink...comes healing... this poem is full of your heart, trust me sweets..its HER loss...you will always deserve better...and you will find it. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
I just joined this forum, but I must say this is one of the most heart filled poems I have read in a very long time! Very well written and full of emotions. Great job! Dark_kisses_within I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Well first of all I'd like to welcome you back. Writing certainly is a tool for venting and you do it very well. I'm glad things are working out better for you...but I do feel your pain and I'm sure with time your wounds will heal. Time is the best physician. Once again...very well done. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
thanks yall for your coments. they mean alot. when that girl said to me i was crushed beyond belief. it took 2 long nights of tears to write this, and it looks like i made the right choice when i left her. when i left her i had my doubts if i did the right thing. and now that i look back i know i did. thanks again yall. the poem i write will hopefully be a happyer one. well i must be off to band practice. keep the coments comming. they are greatly appreiated. All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome back Jesse, we all missed you, myself included as you well know. Glad you are writing again, honestly it becomes a tool to help you.. Sorry you had to deal with all this, but now you are moving on you can understand it's just one of life's hard lessons, which you conquered and came through with flying colours. Well done the poem, yourself, everything! *hugs* There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
isis, *hugs* thanks for your reply. yes i have come passed with flying colours. and i made the right choice in dumping her. i made this into a card and sent this to her. and surprise i havent gotton a reply. but i will move on and this did make me stronger. and if it wasnt for her hurting me i would have never met the one that i am with now. well i must be off. talk to you soon.... All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Great Poem! My soul will never be the same I thought I could trust you So I gave you my heart But all you did was crush it And rip it apart this part of your poem deals a mighty blow and speaks with such power and force. Pain pours forth. Great to see you moved on with you life Dhuron |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
thanks Dhuron. when i wrote this i was feeling so much pain so it just came out in my writing. thanks. yes i have moved on and it couldnt be better.  All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
writing is healing. this is a beautiful way to heal, and yours was a beautiful expression of pain. she obviously didn't deserve the love that you seem to radiate. i hope someone will. jannle Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
I too have had exactly the same experience and so could relate to the feelings and emotions in your poem. It's such a painful thing when you trust someone, love them open up to them, and then find it was nothing more than a time filler or a game of some cruel kind to them. (puppets..pawns..exactly!!!) I wish you luck in love Tess "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
tess puppets and pawns, yes. thats all i felt like i was after i talked to her. a puppet, a pawn, a little toy that she played with. well i am not a toy. i gave her all my love. but she tossed it away. i have moved on and found another. and i know she loves me. and i am happy. and i love it. so to her i leave this poem. emily this ones for you....... All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
James, This poem is so full of hurt and pain and agony. *huggz* Very deeply written....I just love your work...*huggz*... Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
Using my Goddess of Love wand, (look at icon) I give you luck with this newfound relationship. You deserve better than someone who says you're just a "thing". Good luck. ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ I'll be here...why? I'll be waiting...for what? 'll be waiting for you so...if you come here, you'll find me... I promise. |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
thanks again yall. i am so glad that yall like me work. demonic angel thank you for sayin that you always love my work. that made this lonley guitar player happy. and venus, thank you for using your wand of love on me. right now i need all the luck i can need. thanks again yall. you all made my day a hell of alot brighter........ *big hugs to all* ~JeSsE~ All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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StarryEyed Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 20Florida |
Awesome poem! I too have been used, a little too recently. I felt the pain, but it seems like you got through fine. As for me...well I can't say that I got through it. I still long for my mate that decieved me so. It takes a minute to give your heart away, It takes as second for it to break. It takes a lifetime to forget that special someone, And the impact that they make. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Jesse the saddest part is we trust so much and give so much so willingly and they give nothing in return. Our love has no value to them. James |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Jesse, this was great ! I think so many of us have went through the same things, thanks for expressing that emotion for us!! Glad you are writing again and I look forward to reading more!!! Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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