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Kissing The Lips Of Sweet Death (DreamEvil Challenge)
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Kissing The Lips Of Sweet Death (DreamEvil Challenge) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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(A challenge from DreamEvil) Kissing The Lips Of Sweet Death Kissing the lips of sweet death I'm beyond all reasonable doubt Soon, I will take my last breath Seriously this life I've worn out I look forward to ending this life Never needing again to pretend Gladly, putting it all to an end. To taste death is thrilling me Hate never ever felt so fine Each moment simply divine Laughing aloud for all to hear I feel the madness within my head Pressure inside is extremely severe Shortly, this tired brain will be dead Open my eyes, I look at the sky Fearing not, that I will soon die Secret Sanctuary here I come Welcome me with open arms Enchantment I will succumb Entwined within your charms 'Tis I, who'll be your only one Death, as I kiss your sweet lips Encrust me with your rotted soil As I surrender to this total eclipse This has ended my hellish turmoil Heavenly kissing the lips of sweet death ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-28-1999).] [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 09-28-1999).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Soul-sib, I like this piece, your first in Dark. The varied stanzas give a jagged feel to it, like broken glass. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soul-Bro, thank you for the challenge (which I failed to add, please forgive me) I really enjoyed writing it, put my own little picture in my minds eye  Thanks for your lovley comment------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Dang girl. This was a dark one. I love the first 4 lines, that about sums up how I feel today! Good job! ------------------ Cleaning your house while your kids are at home is like trying to shovel the driveway during a snowstorm. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew....definately dark but oh so well written......these lines are great "Death, as I kiss your sweet lips Encrust me with your rotted soil" Nice imagery...I can see that one for sure. Well done!! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Lord I am too tired. I missed that this is also an acrostic! Well done indeed! ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WhtDove, thanks so much hon I appreciate your reply.-------------- Hoot, thank you so much,your comments means so much to me -------------- Soul-bro, An Acrostic, hmm well now I know what you call it thank you so much, for leading me to this ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
To taste Death is thrilling me Hate never felt so fine Each moment simply DIVINE ( As this piece is!) Jenny |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jenny, thank you for your lovely comment ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A challenge well met!! The lines here are filled with a dark imagery not seen in your other work! Very good DA! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Awesome!!! Well done indeed, I didn't notice it was an acrostic until i read Dream's response! Magnificent, I love acrostics, though I will say that it did a smothering job even before that was noticed! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
PDV, thanks so much for your lovley comment ------------------- Christopher, Thank you, your comment means alot to me I must say that I enjoyed writing this ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Larry A. Tilander Junior Member
since 1999-10-04
Posts 13Belleville, Ontario, Canada |
Dear, Take My Hand Darkness embrace me, my lover is dead Earth make me a pillow, a place for my head And sun, close your eye, sweet sky, shed your rain Raise up your flowers, deeply scarlet for pain Tear laden graveyard, my love is a part And now take me too, where you have my heart Keeper of millions, my soul cries to you Embrace me and keep my love there ever new My lips drink to you now, this sweet bitter kiss Yes, no hope in living, or thing that I'll miss Hoping to find love I flee to my grave And bid my heart still now, be silent and brave Now soul seek your mate out, to flesh say goodbye Dying for her now, like you lived, and cried [This message has been edited by Larry A. Tilander (edited 10-04-1999).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Larry....WOW That was soooo beautiful Dark yes but beautiful. Every single line had me in awe. Thank you ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Larry A. Tilander Junior Member
since 1999-10-04
Posts 13Belleville, Ontario, Canada |
Thanks. I re-wrote on line, as it wasn't originally an acrostic. It lost a little strength with the re-writing because of the ands. Glad you enjoyed it. You might want to check out my site. http://sites.netscape.net/larryfig/index.html Cheers. Larry |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Larry Enjoyed it muchly, thanks you and yes I will check out your site ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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