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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Haunted by your memory secretly torturing while comforting me I hear your laughter see the sunlight on your hair so real it can't be a dream but I turn and you're not there I hear your whispers things that you had said but how can this be? they told me you were dead! before my eyes you begin to fade away NO! WAIT! DON'T LEAVE!! please say that you will stay I'm not ready to say goodbye I don't want to forget stay with me don't leave NOT YET!!! ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
StarrGazer. . . sometimes, the most painful part can be not letting go, but remebering that you really did. . . and sometimes. . . you have to say goodbye. . . Excellent words, my friend. . . By the way, your poem is done. . .check it out in Open #6! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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morteZ Junior Member
since 2000-03-16
Posts 17 |
I had to say that I really like the line: "I see the sunlight on your hair". It reminds me of Leonard Cohen, and he has a magic with his words. |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
*cries* That reminded me of what I am going through...I miss my dad so much...I see him..I hear him...He don't leave...but when isn't there...It hurts to know that I am going insane...Wonderfully written...Your words speak dearly to me...*hugz* Carpe Diem... |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Sven- thanks for th ecomments ...heading over to open in a few can't wait to read it  morteZ-thanks for your comments that line kinda stuck with me too demonic~angel-((((((hugz)))))) it's ok hun, we're all here for you if you need us... take care ! ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
so sad! so simple yet such a gut-wrenching cry of the soul! i honestly felt ready to cry! can i just say...wow! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Aiden Kelly - thanks your words are too kind !!! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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