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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods 
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I lay still Hope, faith, love... Everything is gone I whisper in the dark Why me? What did I do to deserve this? The words left me lifeless... Some say life`s a game Then I guess I did`nt know how to play You may think it`s selfish Maby it is... But you don`t know the pain After all It was you who left me lifeless... My wrists is laughing Life`s draining Blood`s spilling In thickening streams on the floor My eyes`s startin` to fade Soon I`ll leave this place lifeless... But suddenly A change of mind I try to turn But it`s to late My arms to weak And tears burn my eyes As the last drop leaves me lifeless... All the tears I`ve cried Useless... And all the feelings I`ve felt Useless... And all the love I`ve shed Useless... And all the hope I had Useless... And every wish I`ve ever wished Useless... Everything is useless... Now that all I am And all I ever will be is Lifeless... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hi, welcome to Passions...this one is an emotional and well written first impression...nice work, nice to have you here. take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome indeed!! This one nearly slipped by me as they sometimes do!! Lovely, feeling, well written first impression here. Hoping to see more soon. Welcome to the passions family  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
well done very deep poem very dark emotional "As the life of me streamed back to the earth from my wounds from my stigmata I sighed and my voice spoke to no one telling them my truth in this act "I am free" And a great warmth overcame me and i was truely at peace with control of destiny for eternity So no border could hold me and freedom was finally mine" Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
let me also welcome you to dark. and i agree, quite a worthy first impression. looking forward to more. i love too much, and not enough. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
welcome. glad to see the forum growing. i liked the phrasing repitition. very well written. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Welcome to this family of poets. Nice work you have posted. Strong emotions for sure. Perfect fit for Dark Passions. Look forward to seeing more of your work. |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Useless, thats exactly how I felt, and the wrists laughing, I was thinking of doing that, but I have so much ahead of me. NICE WORK. Hope to hear more, Much love, One love, PEACE |
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