The Opening - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-10 04:16 PM

Tie me up
Tear me down
Your words burn into me
You take my soul out of me
Now how do you feel
To see me so low?
Happiness is hell
You make my blood run cold
And you claw at my face
Peel the skin back
Torture me
Keep me from sleeping
Because dreams destroy
And I am the next one to go
And I am the last one to know
I am all that you fear
Yet I am the one in misery
Take me
Just take me
Take me away
From this pain

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-10 08:52 PM

Because dreams destroy
And I am the next one to go
And I am the last one to know
I am all that you fear
Yet I am the one in misery
Take me
Just take me
Take me away
From this pain"

having a bad day hon... tylenol helps

(kidding)

this is powerful...it drips with your angst and misery...painful to read...excellent...
stalking you still,jm

ps...did I read that first line right...
tie you up??...no, no, its too easy...I'll be good...

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-11-2000).]

ill_tactics
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 149

2 posted 2000-03-11 08:40 PM

I need someone to take me away period, away from this world, this feeling, this pain called life. Nice piece of work. Much love, One love, PEACE

devinmaria
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio

3 posted 2000-03-12 01:12 PM

this one really explains how im feeling right now. you hit the nail on the head.

And I am the next one to go
And I am the last one to know
I am all that you fear
Yet I am the one in misery

this is me...this is sooooo me!!! in the words of a great band by the name of LIT, "You make me come, You make me complete, You make me completely miserable." great line and i do believe its saying almost what your poem is saying. great read.

aimee

Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2000-03-13 09:23 AM

JML~ Wow! This is very powerful and heartfelt.

-SEA

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.