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hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

0 posted 2000-03-05 01:49 PM

Descending with angelic grace from Heaven’s azure dome,
A solitary snowflake falls to rest upon the heart;
Freezing touch permeating callus-scarred once broken flesh.
Heaven’s pride, a bead of white, slowly slithers through the cracks
To touch and taste with sweet embrace the tender core within.
Pleasure spasms, frosty chills, wrack the body, shake the mind,
Wreak havoc on a broken heart incapable of love.
Barely noticed begins the glow, a spark within the depths.
Callus stripped off is consumed, kindling for the growing flame.
Dilating to hold the heart complete, fire burns to blue.
Melting eyes telling all: this conflagration burns too hot.
Evaporated, turned to air, the snowflake pushed away.
This fading flame, burning with pain, turns into a pyre.
The shattered heart softly weeps, blood tears freezing to the earth.

hailfellow
"If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense."
~Nietzsche

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-05 10:23 PM

wow, this imagery in this is excellent...very well written, great work!

...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

2 posted 2000-03-06 12:50 PM

incredible and beautiful imagery. i am left in awe. great work.

hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

3 posted 2000-03-06 10:00 PM

Thanks for the nice comments. Although I'm never left in awe by my own poetry(maybe disgusted sometimes), thank you anyway. Have a nice day.

hailfellow
"If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense."
~Nietzsche

Andreja Nikki
Junior Member

since 2000-03-06

Posts 18

4 posted 2000-03-06 10:56 PM

I feel as if I am able to see and understand everything that is going on inside of your mind. I can relate to what you are feeling and was really blown away at the way you poured your heart out. A wonderful job. I am well amazed.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2000-03-07 04:15 PM

Wonderful poem, vivid imagery. Welcome to Dark Passions, hailfellow...hope to see more from you soon.

michael

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