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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 2000-03-03 09:00 PM


The curtain closes,
I won't bow or receive the applause,
The curtain in fact a metaphor,
For my life's unrealised flaws.

I'm no star, and never will be again,
An amateur dreaming that's me,
They offered fake enthusiasm,
They didn't really see.

The curtain closes on me,
There will be no applause,
For my days of shining are over,
And I've closed the doors.

The darkness of the back stage,
Suits me well and fine,
Suits the darkness of my life,
The happiness I can't find.

This happiness so elusive,
So fleeting in it's visit,
Daily realities chase it away,
Leaving me bereft and to sit.

To contemplate my life,
The good, the ugly and the bad,
Checking the scales,
What weighs more the happy times or the sad?

It's 50/50 I feel,
Sometimes up, sometimes down,
Today definitely a downer,
Lonliness, such an empty sound.

I sang those songs that empower me,
The flame did not ignite,
And so the curtain closes,
I succumb to the darkness and fright.

I succumb to the feelings of wretchedness,
Succumb to my misery,
I fight, but I must learn to suffer in silence,
For no one shall ever save me..



 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



© Copyright 2000 Isis - All Rights Reserved
JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
1 posted 2000-03-04 11:23 AM


Oh, Wow!  Isis, you never cease to amaze me in your poetry.  I was there, like this was me!!!!  Great work....and dark

Joy


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 2000-03-04 11:47 AM


This is a very sad one Isis  
Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-03-04 12:22 PM


Isis, you are such a good writer.  The expression is so real and easily felt by the reader.  I enjoy all your work.  This one, though sad, is the way we all feel about that "stage" one time or another.
Nice work.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-03-04 12:50 PM


isis, this is beautifully expressed, I relate to this one well...we all feel like this sometimes, but in the end...you always shine in your role

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
5 posted 2000-03-05 11:40 AM


Sad and so beautifully written Isis ....  Miss you , my friend .....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon






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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-03-05 10:32 PM


Can't you hear that voice in the background?  The music of the heart?

Listen again, my friend. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-03-06 02:08 PM


lovely isis. incredible feelings of isolation. especially in the ending.
jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
8 posted 2000-03-06 02:18 PM


Well, I hate to say it but you're right no one will ever save you - you have to SAVE YOURSELF, Isis.  And I know you don't need to hear that from me either...LOL  Usually, I need to hear it from you.  But seriously, if you have 50% of your days on the upswing you got it good in my book... You don't have to succumb to anything...remember that.  ((HUGS))


Michael

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
9 posted 2000-03-06 02:47 PM


"Quiet Desperation"......So well documented here. You think if we were all 100% happy, we would still write? I don't think so. Oh well, a trade-off. *S*
StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
10 posted 2000-03-06 04:54 PM


Isis great poem !  

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2000-03-07 08:19 AM


Isis this poem reminds me of the song "bye, bye, miss american pie".   You will save yourself someday when you take hold of your destiny and I am sure it will be a glorious day.   James
Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30
Posts 444
USA
12 posted 2000-03-07 12:40 PM


I liked this...and the metaphor was indeed a theaterical one but quite realistic.
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