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devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio

0 posted 2000-03-01 12:42 PM


you touched my heart
with lying words
you killed my joy
and dying hurts
you saw me cry
you saw it all
you did enough
to make tears fall
you tore my soul
now pieces heal
you never thought about
how i would feel
so now i cry
as you stand tall
you broke my heart
now pieces fall



 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

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Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-01 04:21 PM


devin, I feel the pain in this one...I love this poem... very well expressed... love hurts BAD sometimes...Im thankful to have the poetry as an outlet!!
take care, janet marie

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
Jackson Browne
*I miss you baby...
I love you...always.


sonjes
Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-03-01 04:26 PM


Nah, love doesn't hurt sometimes.  It hurts 99% of the time.  Somebody please show us that other 1%!  Breaking up can be a soul-wrenching experience, can't it devinmaria?  You expressed the emotions involved with grace.  What's worse, breaking up or loving someone that does not love you in return?
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-03-01 07:21 PM


Not cleche' but painful, you wrote this with your pain and sensitivity.  Well done  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



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