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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Tonight I lay me down to rest Leave this world, leave this mess I’ve taken care of everything Of me they all will sing, “He was such a normal boy” But in truth, I was the Reaper’s toy Tonight is the night I die From my body I will fly To the halls of the dead They will play with my head But it’s only a waste of time I’ll fight to keep this soul of mine They’ll see I’m not in their plan For the forsaken race of Man Angels of life and death will see Their games only set me free For I bow to no one, pay homage to none I am all there is, the only one I’ll transcend this esoteric darkness To escape the wise men’s blindness You can’t get something for nothing you see In this world you can’t have freedom for free But this world will never see me again Unless you too have consciousness to win I can use the key to unlock the door Of elder knowledge and forgotten lore In the scrolls there is a name Printed in blood on paper so plain Along with the last rose of summer you’ll see He who will deliver us all is only me Tonight I will have died Those who misunderstand will have cried But tears for my sake waste not one Cry for the bloodshed left undone There are those who have suffered worse In my kingdom, these will come first… The sleep is still in my eyes, in my head As I lie awhile in my bed I sigh with sweetest sorrow For I will be dead tomorrow To claim my kingdom of the solitary rover I smile; then my lifeblood spills over |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~JML~ Wow!!! Now this really had some major depth. Blew me away! I am not sure if I totally understood all of it...but from what I do understand sounds to me as if a divine plan has been set into place? like there is something more than what is here on earth...very well written...left me thinking!! take care, Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You can’t get something for nothing you see In this world you can’t have freedom for free But this world will never see me again Unless you too have consciousness to win I can use the key to unlock the door Of elder knowledge and forgotten lore In the scrolls there is a name Printed in blood on paper so plain Along with the last rose of summer you’ll see He who will deliver us all is only me" WOW... Amy is right this one is DEEP!! and excellent..I wish to request that the author share some of his moments of inspiration and "cryptic" messages of this one... still stalking you..JM PS..I just love stacking these all up in a row..LOL She says baby, It's 3am I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. Matchbox20 I love you baby... always.* |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks Aimster, yes, there is a divine plan. Basically, it is hard for me to explain, other than it is my philosophy, that i want to keep my consciousness and my very oneness when i depart earth. I feel too aware of myself for me not to. Plus, janet, i was inspired as i usually am, by words that just appear in my head. I was thinking about my personal philosophy and also in a depressed state of mind(As is obvious), but this was high school, and there were other subtle metaphors. To make someone else think, that is the greatest gift in life, other than making someone laugh. Thanks JM. |
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star83 Junior Member
since 2000-02-27
Posts 26SD |
I feel a sense of awareness throughout this poem. The title itself is almost preparing you for an in-depth thought...in which you are talking to yourself, as the title suggests. I was caught off-guard, though, on these particular lines; "Printed in blood on paper so plain/Along with the last rose of summer you'll see." It may mean a whole lot of things, but I'm not sure what you are trying to get across. Seemingly, the tone felt very condesceding. This is all my opinion, of course, but I was curious as to what YOU would say your tone would be?... Very good piece of poetry, no doubt. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Condescending? That's not what i was going for, and i hope no one thinks i was being that way. It was more or less, my personal superego/id discussion, and a delving into what lies in wait for our beingness. Thanks for reading. |
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