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~Pain Left Behind~
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~Pain Left Behind~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Pain Left Behind~ When you talk...you speak in whispers, When you cry...you share no tears. When you love...you take no prisoners, When you confess...you make sure no one hears. I wanted to believe you'd let me hold you, I wanted to love you so damn desperately. I never needed anyone else like this, sadly you never knew. I understand--its not all your fault... too much pain and too much damage wouldn't let you give your heart to me. When you hurt...you invite pain in season, When you take...its always more than you need. When you lie...you claim to have reasons, When you ache...you make others bleed. I'll take the blame for this pain and sorrow... although the mistakes have not been all mine. There's no chance that this love will see tomorrow ... and it breaks my heart to leave it all behind. Janet Marie I love you Is all that you can't say- Years gone by and still... Words don't come easily Like I love you, I love you... But you can say baby... Baby can I hold you tonight Maybe if I told you the right words At the right time you'd be mine... Tracy Chapman |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Wow! i can feel the hurt in this one, janet...good job! "Falling in love is just that - falling. Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe. Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees. But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die." |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Sad poem Janet!! But don't take the blame hon, blame the fates, he wasn't the one for you. Too many people blame themselves and that leads to more problems. (HUGS) hon. May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks Starboards and Isis... hugs to you too  where you been hiding Star... seems like its been awhile since we heard from ya...glad your back! take care, janet marie< !signature--> ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. your my inspiration, your my fire... your words fill me with poetic desire. Every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-23-2000).] |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
you have done it once again janet! i know the feeling all too well. as usual, a wonderful piece. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ This is excellent!!-SEA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wow Janet this is wonderful writing. James |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Another excelent poem loved your language brilliantly ran continuous brilliance Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you danni, SEA, jimmy, and Walter, I REALLY appreciate you guys always taking the time to read my work... BRILLANCE??? I dunno Walter...but I'll try to live up to your kind words and praise  THANKS take care janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
"When you ache...you make others bleed." I really liked this line, as well as the poem in general. Jannel |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Janet Marie, I could feel your pain as I read this and I sure can relate. Your poetry is wonderful, however I'm sorry for the pain behind this one. Sheila |
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cope New Member
since 2000-02-23
Posts 4 |
I understand the pain that has flowed throw your vains and touched your thoughts, well writen. cope |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
It EXTREMELY hard when you can't get close to someone you love because they have "too much damage". I find myself, again, relating to every word you've written, and feeling your pain as well. Michael |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Oh my, I need a hug now. That was very good janet, reminds me of my pains that I have now. I have many poems similar to this one. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
thanks for commenting on my poem! i'm on the lookout for all your poems, too! they're always so beautiful and touching. i don't think i've read one yet that i didn't like. i always feel like i'm right there and that i feel what you're feeling, too. how do you do it, girl!  ) |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
 sniff sniff! I really need to read someone else's poetry. I know it's raining out and all but I don't need to start crying agian. Once I do, I usually don't stop!Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
really good, and bittersweet. Nicely written. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
that was so beautiful... to speak in whispers ...to cry without tears...to lie and claim reasons...to take more than you need... gosh it reminds me of soo much... again janet...((((((hug))))))))) btw baby can i hold you tonight... i love that song... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Janet Marie Seems you and I have more in common that I knew. This poem was filled with such sadness. But it also spoke about other things as well. Like what happens when a person has just had to much pain in thier lives..can they open up their hearts and move on and learn to love again? Some of us can but some of us can't...and even though it hurts like hell, we have to let them go.I felt this poem with my heart completely. I will be thinking of you as you go thru this journey of healing. Love ya, Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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