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The shadow that rips itself apart...
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The shadow that rips itself apart... |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
shaking because theres nothing left to hold on to this believing for the season my only reason for not picking up this mess sparing all the time alone ..wishing you never were a self imposed ripped apart shadow of a diseased and desperate heart... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow...so much emotion spoke in so few words...and the last line...amazing!! superb jackal! janet marie Now for me some words come easy... But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch. You never knew what I loved in you-- I don't know what you loved in me... Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be... How long have I been sleeping- How long have I been drifting alone through the night... How long have I've dreaming I could make it right... If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might To be the one you need... Jackson Browne |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Jackal this is very nicely written and very talented. James |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Loved the last line, hope the shadow strengthens and walks into the sunlight again soon. (HUGS) May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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BlOoD TiEs Junior Member
since 1999-10-02
Posts 30New York City |
i liked it! Dont bet on fast horses, bet on slow rabits. |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
simple but absolutely riveting. i've been there. you captured it far better than i ever could. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
This flowed so well I had to go back and read it again. Each word led onto the next! Great feeling on this one! |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
unfair. janet said exactly what i would have, so i am left with nothing to say except that i really enjoyed it. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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