Dark Poetry #1 |
Who Said? |
Bronx Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84Oviedo, Florida, U.S. |
Who Said? Who said I cannot finish, Who said I can't succed, Who said I cannot do it, Who said I can't be me? Who said I can't do this, Who said I can't do that, Who said that I'm to skinny, Who said that I'm to fat? Who said ta do it this way, Who said ta do it that way, Who said I can't do it my way, Who said ta do it anyway? Who said that I should give up, Who said that I should go home, Who said that I would grow up, Who said that I'd grow old? Who said I cannot finish, Who said I can't succed, Who said I cannot do it, Who said I can't be me? I did by Bronx Be careful! It's a jungle out there! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
great work here bronx...i guess we are all our own worst enemy sometimes...this was a good look inward on those thoughts.good rhyme flow to it as well. take care, janet marie "Bring it on baby what you getting into... I swear at once it was the little things that mattered-- But it all seems true to you. Say the hell with my name and say the hell with my picture... but swear, for the one time you need me around. And here I'll stand like it matters... Only once love gets through then gets scattered by the rain... But pain gives me the right to be unkind"... Tabitha's Secret |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
nice work bronx. we sometimes dont reallize that the things we do in life are because we choose to do them. we always have a choice. and those choices dictate where our life goes. again, nice work, look forward to more. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Very good! Although you read it to me I still liked it, even the second time through!! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice rhyme flow Bronx. Try saying some nice things to yourself once in a while !!!(laugh) James |
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