Dark Poetry #1 |
Power Trip |
danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
I see through your transparent facade Your intentions reflected clearly in your eyes You think me gullible, easily overcome because you have seen me fall You think my hunger for acceptance can be satsisfied with a spoonful of your sugar-coated lies You are driven by desire to subdue this person you assume to be docile and meek But, your thirst for power and need to be in control, is what leaves you blinded in the pursuit of me Your exaggerated strength proves how weak you are; and will inevitably destroy you See........ My passiveness is meant to feign lending me the opportunity to break you and your pretence down; First in my mind, then in actuality Without you even knowing what happened until you have already fallen from your ignoble pedistal For the greater power lies in knowing how and when to be observant and meek. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Once again, danni, remind me NEVER to get on your bad side. Wow... Timid on the outside, raging on the inside. Great poem. Michael |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
This is great! The strength of character radiating from your words is wonderful. The hidden strength behind the quite demeanor. Thank you for sharing. |
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moebius Junior Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 11 |
Great twist! "Beware the meek, for they shall rise against you will great vengence" - me (I just made that up ) Anyway, another great poem danni. I'm turning into a fan - is there a club? |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
gave me a few ideas about how to deal with a certain husband of mine that needs to be taught a few lessons. thank!!! very well said. Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
ooooooooh, I liked that. Sounds like me, silent but deadly....hahaha Once again a great poem.... Much love, One love, PEACE |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Unfortunately, meek is not a common male characteristic. Many men believe that power defines them and they use it to control and manipulate. I think you are hip to this trip. Anyway, your poem is really good. I like your assertiveness and confidence. Now, confidence in women is something that this male really appreciates. Best regards, Danny |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Lol at micheal. don't worry. its pretty hard to get on my bad side. i really am a mellow person. at least until somenone starts playing with my emotions and taking advantage of my good will. thanks to everyone for your wonderful comments. you have know idea how much i appreciate them, and you all. this was sort of a tribute to all those "friends" and would be "lovers" of mine that thought they could run me over when i was down. lets just say they got a rude awakening |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is SO great Danni...well written and expressed and you cover so many emotions so well...I like the way you ended it..with the passive emotions...making the strongest statement. great job! janet marie When you look in the mirror... Wish you were somebody else Just a perfect reflection You and no one else... Minutes run into hours Hours run into days You're still waiting for someone Who never ever came... Go and run through the hallways Find your way to the door You will end up like always Back where you were before... Then you look in the mirror Wish you were somebody else But it's still your reflection You and no one else... Guster |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
"with a spoonful of your sugar-coated lies" Great couple of lines here. Joy |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
I really cannot say anything that hasn't already been said. i was going to comment on the sugar coated lies line, but i have been beat to it. A wonderful reflection of inner strength. Jannel |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Danni, so sorry i nearly missed this one! And glad I didn't!! I'm glad to see you have a firm hold on your inner strength and it will sustain you when needed. You go girl, show 'em what you're made of May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
janet-i have always felt passiveness is much stronger and more effective than aggression. thank you for your comments. joy and jannel- many thanks to you too. isis- i am also glad you didn't miss this! that inner strength is all i've had to sustain me thus far, so trust me, i hod it tight! thanks! |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
great post danni. i have been that person before, actually i am that person now, but i dont think ive come to the part where i turn it all around yet. still controlled, still meek. but working on it and this gives me inspiration. thanks alot!! aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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