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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554


0 posted 2000-02-13 11:56 PM


~Rhyme Without Reason~

Time and space, my dreams erased,
I'm lost inside of me.
No pain, no gain...a heartaches refrain,
loneliness wont let me be.

To have and to hold...until we get old ...
die trying to live this lie.
A twist of fate, the loss too great,
I could drown in the tears I cry.

Come what may, you were taken away,
only my promises get me thru.
Breaking my heart...fate keeps us apart,
but...I will always belong to you.

Janet Marie
                  

                    

 In the time we've known
That we each are a part of one another
We've lost as much as we have won...
And as our lives have grown
We have found that it only brings us pain
To hang on to the things that we have done...
***Still I love the times you've come***

Jackson Browne



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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-02-14 12:29 PM


Fits my mood tonight. Like the rhyme scheme, did this piece justice it did.

 -*Hope the dream.
---*Wish the future.
------*Live the now.



Michael
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Posts 7666
California
2 posted 2000-02-14 04:36 AM


Well I see much reason behind this rhyme, as well as pain.  This truly aches janet, a beautiful but very sad work.


michael

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 2000-02-14 08:41 AM


Sad but honest. I like that!!!
The rhyme was good too  


Jennifer

Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

4 posted 2000-02-14 11:34 AM


Always a pleasure to read your work

Again brilliant

              Walter

Accross the skies we fly together you and i we stop and swoop away to play with winds of the day

Now your lost from the day i cannot find your beauty my dray still i look till the break of a thousand days

 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd


JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
5 posted 2000-02-14 09:50 PM


I can't help noticing your signiture verse corosponds so well with your poem here.  I loved the ryhme on this too!

Joy

 Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick



Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
6 posted 2000-02-15 12:17 PM


Beautiful. Love the rhyme pattern.
Jannel

Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2000-02-15 01:10 PM


Janet. . .

The sadness radiates throughout this poem. . . wonderful work my frined. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


baerlon
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
8 posted 2000-02-15 03:17 PM


Well done i enjoyed this one alot.  It hit home with me and the emotions it contained

 'Cause if the face inside can't see the light I know
I'll have to walk alone
And if I walk alone to the other side I know
I might not make it home
(creed)

ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

9 posted 2000-02-16 12:34 PM


Exactly!!!  The feelings my heart felt, when it was broken in two.  Though I know I belong to him, my heart he will not embrace.... This poem is very nicely stated, and well written.  Much love, One love, PEACE



devinmaria
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
10 posted 2000-02-16 12:53 PM


Amazingly spells out my life.  Extremely vivid pictures it paints for me.  Well written.  

 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

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