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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Loves Old Cliche'~ Someone once said the words..."misery loves company"... This wisdom still holds true, Who ever spoke it...must have once loved you. I thought you were so special-- Like every love song written, all my dreams put into verse. Instead you were a nightmare...an unrelenting curse. Why can I now see it all so clearly-- You read me for weak--I mistook you for kind... and when it all came down, I nearly lost my mind. For you, no need was ever too great, You took all that there was left...all that there was to take. How does it feel, to be my life's most costly mistake. Looking back-another old phrase comes to mind-- More cliches' of love, to help my broken heart mend... "The same thing that you wish for--will kill you in the end." Janet Marie this was another poetry worshop assignment...its purpose being to make us aware of how often poets and writers borrow and incorporate old quotes and phrases from the past. how many times have I written the term "broken heart"...too many to count...(smile)..but I'm always grateful for the inspiration. ...found your heart-then lost your lover...licked your wounds then run for cover... take your time...there will be another... and dont make the same mistake twice... unless you can pay the price... Dan Fogelberg |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Janet Marie, You did a great job of incorporating some cliche's so that it really didn't even seem that way. ~Gene |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written janet... "The same thing that you will wish for will kill you in the end..." i fel like that right now... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written janet... "The same thing that you will wish for will kill you in the end..." i fel like that right now...  you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Another old cliche' "Be careful what you wish for or you may just get it!" Well written, and the ending so true, what you give out comes back to you times three. It's true it really does happen.  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
I really liked this one. I especially like the rhyme scheme. And that last line is too true. Well done! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
"The same thing that you wish for--will kill you in the end." How true. Great job!!! Jennifer |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~ i like...i like very much...so keep smiling girl, cuz im gonna keep replying. this one was pretty cool gotta say. really liked the line that read "I thought you were so special...like every love song written, all my dreams put into verse...instead you were a nightmare, an unrelenting curse. this is definitely something i can identify with. powerful emotions swept over me while reading this one. thanks a mil. amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Love this one! "Workshop does the writing good" Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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