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I Give Up....... |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
All that is left to do is cry I'm so sick of words My life cannot be an explanation I'm not anything that can be described I've lost I don't think I can go back To who I was before Maybe I wandered down the wrong track If I did I didn't even see where I was turning. I am book without words Blank pages Half have been riped out By me. I'm so sick of words But that's all that can come out of me I have to hang on to what's left All that's left in me... A poet who is loosing her life One word at a time I can't go back I can't step forward All that's left to do Is breakdown And sob until I drown in my own suffering... My tears, My sorrow, My unforgiving life. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Tears cleanse the soul. Cry often. Especially liked "Blank pages... by me." Beautiful line. Jannel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is very good Joy..full of emotion..well expressed...sometimes we do feel like we cant go back to the way we were-before... janet marie ...found your heart-then lost your lover...licked your wounds then run for cover... take your time...there will be another... and dont make the same mistake twice... unless you can pay the price... Dan Fogelberg |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
out of personal experience, i think the trick is to let yourself break down. cry-rant-rave-get it all out and don't be afraid. after all done, things become a little clearer. i could relate to every line. this was a wonderful piece. keep your head up! from the bottom things can only get better. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I agree with jannel, tears are good, cry it out. Sometimes that's all we have left to do. Michael |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Joy: I often feel this way, I relate to every line of your poem. I have always related and/or stood in awe of your poems. You have a great talent. Thank you for writing this, in reading your poem it helps me to feel these emotions. Sometimes crying allows the heart to move on and heal. Take care, Melissa Honeybee  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thanks everyone! I know, crying really helps, and it seems to cleanse my soul and makes me get my priorities straight. Btw, Melissa, thanks for your comments. You definetly put a huge smile  on my face when I was feeling pretty low, which was exactly why I wrote this poem! Joy |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Joy, I really like your poems. You don't hold anything back. So don't hold back your tears either--let it out. You can't rebuild without breaking a few things first. And don't forget, there's a reason your name is Joy. ~Gene |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
While I agree with most of the replies here, there comes a time when the crying must cease and realization begins. Well Done Piece Jennifer |
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