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a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
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0 posted 2000-02-09 01:52 PM


Look at You

Look at you laying over there
pulling out your hair
adopting the blank stare
of my teddybear.
Look at you laying over there
begging for some one to care
pretending to be inanimate like my teddybear.
Look at you laying over there
attempting to melt my dead cold stare
wishing I would pretend I were there
trying to make me love you like I do my teddybear.
Look at you laying over there
I hope you freeze in your pretentious stare.
I have accepted, loved, and tried one too many times...
now I simpley do not care!


(just some thing a bit sarcastic....)


 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

© Copyright 2000 a-alibaster (H.A.R.) - All Rights Reserved
danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-02-09 02:32 PM


absolutely wonderful! i loved it! wish i could show it to my ex!  

 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
2 posted 2000-02-13 01:21 PM


Excellent Sarcasm a-alibaster  

Jennifer

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-02-13 06:34 PM


I can relate to the last lines "I have accepted, loved, and tried one to many times..now I simply do not care.  Something I am going thru right now has given me reason to feel exactly like that.  Yes, one to many times.  and now I simply do not care.   Very nice write.   James
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-02-13 08:33 PM


I too relate, you can only try so many times, in the end, to save yourself, you have to stop caring about their feeble attempts at attention or to emotionally blackmail you.  (HUGS) and hope your Valentine's Day is ok.  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

5 posted 2000-02-14 11:25 AM


Many thank yous to all that responded. I was not sure if any would understand what I was attempting to state....alas, I see that you understood completely!!
**hugs tight** Happy V day to you as well Isis, and all!!


 There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul...
a-alibaster

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-02-14 04:15 PM


Alibaster-
this is so great..I dont know how I missed it before...I love the sarcastic wit and angry definace...great work!! janet marie

 In the time we've known
That we each are a part of one another
We've lost as much as we have won...
And as our lives have grown
We have found that it only brings us pain
To hang on to the things that we have done...
***Still I love the times you've come***

Jackson Browne



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