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Fading Into Eternity (slightly revised re-post)
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Fading Into Eternity (slightly revised re-post) |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
I walk beside a river born of my own tears And watch my dreams now tuned to dust being washed away I look to the water to find a reflection But it's too hard to recognize the person that I see Eyes that used to burn so bright and full of life are now clouded over by the depth of sadness within my soul I hear a familiar voice retreating to the distance I find it is my own But the words are hollow and fall.... meaningless So I keep on walking Staying in the shadows of this dark and lonely path A prisoner of my own silence Fading into eternity < !signature--> Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- [This message has been edited by danni (edited 02-07-2000).] |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Like it A LOT! You said this was revised? I wonder if I read the other one. It sounds familar. Well, if I didn't I didn't. I read this though and I think it's excellent Danni! |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
This is a great poem! I like the insightfulness into your sadness and solitude. Excellent imagery. Well done! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Joy-if i'm not mistaken, i do believe you have read the other one. so thanx for reading it and responding with a wonderful comment-again.  LB-many thanx for your kind comment as well. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautifully done, danni. A great poem all the way through. michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
another excellent work from danni!! this is So very good, and expressive!! i love the line-"river born of my own tears"...very good!! janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thanks to both of you so very much for your comments. as always, they are very much appreciated. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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