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Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
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Muncie, IN, USA

0 posted 2000-02-06 05:10 PM



Enchanted kingdoms await
Roses bloom around your face
Faerie dust seals your fate
Fall to velvet, she in lace
Swim in drips of siver moon
Through a diamond dotted sky
I will join you up there soon
When my own day passes by


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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-06 05:43 PM


Jannel,
this is ABSOLUTELY beautiful!!!!!!
In just a few words you painted such an expressive and lovely image.
VERY GOOD!!!
janet marie

 ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces---
did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still...
and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually...
then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart gave me away"....

Glass Tiger



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-02-06 06:18 PM


Beautiful paradise almost.. really enjoyed this  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



TanAngel
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since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
3 posted 2000-02-06 07:21 PM


Bravo! This poem is beautiful I wish I could find that paridice soon.


 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
4 posted 2000-02-07 09:47 AM


not much different to say-i agree with the rest-this is beautiful-teh image of being reunited with loved ones who have gone before us.
well done!


 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

DayDreamer
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since 2000-01-16
Posts 30

5 posted 2000-02-07 09:07 PM


It's always hard to get to the fairy tale land, isn't it?  Great poem.  I got the image you set in beautiful color.  DayDreamer



 "Keep hope, for a candle in the strongest wind will still give light."

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
6 posted 2000-02-07 11:36 PM


I enjoyed writing a duality. It takes on different meaning whether you see it as a lullabye or a song for the dying. Thank you all for your sweet comments.
Jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
7 posted 2000-02-08 01:48 PM


Enchanting poem, Jannel.  Definately sings like a soft lullabye.


Michael

poetry_kills
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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
8 posted 2000-02-08 03:39 PM


jannel: this is very good   i particularly like the line "through a diamond dotted sky"... very good work  

sincerely,
jerome the mysterious priest

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge



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