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Lullabye or Dirge
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Lullabye or Dirge |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Enchanted kingdoms await Roses bloom around your face Faerie dust seals your fate Fall to velvet, she in lace Swim in drips of siver moon Through a diamond dotted sky I will join you up there soon When my own day passes by |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Jannel, this is ABSOLUTELY beautiful!!!!!! In just a few words you painted such an expressive and lovely image.  VERY GOOD!!! janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful paradise almost.. really enjoyed this  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Bravo! This poem is beautiful I wish I could find that paridice soon. "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
not much different to say-i agree with the rest-this is beautiful-teh image of being reunited with loved ones who have gone before us. well done! Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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DayDreamer Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 30 |
It's always hard to get to the fairy tale land, isn't it? Great poem. I got the image you set in beautiful color. DayDreamer "Keep hope, for a candle in the strongest wind will still give light." |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
I enjoyed writing a duality. It takes on different meaning whether you see it as a lullabye or a song for the dying. Thank you all for your sweet comments. Jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Enchanting poem, Jannel. Definately sings like a soft lullabye. Michael |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
jannel: this is very good i particularly like the line "through a diamond dotted sky"... very good work sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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