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Dark Poetry #1

Un-wishful

baerlon
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

0 posted 2000-01-20 01:06 AM

I am scared to death
All my wishes are coming true
As benign as it might be
My wishes frighten me

A past comes to me here, now
God help my selfish soul
Push the fears aside
Stop it, save your foolish bickering

I will cry, burn, and die
Alone I stand
They came down, yet I was blinded
Alone I stand

I am stiff with emotions
Like a demon in Gods path I scream
A pain like no others
My wishes came true

baerlon

Poetic Sadness
Junior Member

since 2000-01-15

Posts 12
Kelowna, BC, Canada

1 posted 2000-01-20 01:08 AM

This poem describes very well the outcome of being careful what you wish for, you just might get it. I really enjoyed it, great job.

Heather M.

The things you fear are undefeatable not by their nature, but by your approach.
-Jewel

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

2 posted 2000-01-20 01:10 AM

I echo Poetic Sadness on this one. Well done.

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

3 posted 2000-01-20 05:38 PM

Powerful ending. Wishes are important, but I think you captured the danger we all feel when we start to see what we asked for and it isn't quite what we imagined it would be.
Jannel

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