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brandywine Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19Illinois |
The fragile wind sets sail..deliverance in its wake the trees wave as it passes..the wheat bows in respect the sun reflected in its joy...the heart diminished.... then fell away The wasp grasped the perch from which it stood.. determined not to move.. the gull remained though...flapping its wings..giliding or something to prove The sand jostled for position....the waves.. helped their cause.. the woman..she stood beside herself...reflecting a time of pause Her hair flowing..gusting like a flag.. her face turned towards the wind... still unsure of all her thoughts... she lowers the gun down...from her head Death is not so far away..his face is not so cold.. it's essence..immoratilty...but what if.. i change my mind? Peace of mind....free of sin....from woman to take my leave peace and contempmant...but what if I wish to come again? Everyday struggle...dispair in my wake.. the gyspies screaming in my mind the woman who lives in the mirror looks at me in disgust.....she even shakes her head |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Wonderful and powerful! Vivid imagery! Deeply felt words. Welcome to Passions! I look forward to more of your work. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
...and are we all that woman with those very same thoughts at some time or another... I know I have been. I think this is extremely well written and thought out...thank you for a wonderful read. Welcome and I will be awaiting more... There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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brandywine Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19Illinois |
Thank you for the feedback. Just a feeling today, ya know. We are each of us angels with only one wing... and the only way we are able to fly.. is by embracing each other. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
The fourth section and last line are so genuine. I so enjoy our freedom in poetry to feel things aloud that we would not tell even our closest friend about. Beautiful. Jannel |
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brandywine Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19Illinois |
thank you J.....i am glad someone likes it and knows the meaning We are each of us angels with only one wing... and the only way we are able to fly.. is by embracing each other. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I so enjoyed the fluid motion of this piece...very power-filled. Jenny Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I have no soothing words to say except I am here to listen. I hope that is enough. Welcome to the family again my friend. "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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brandywine Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19Illinois |
Thanks Bo.... |
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